Really really cool. In a creepy creepy way, which is the best way in my opinion. However, there were a few grammatical errors. For example when you begin a sentence with the word "but", you do not need to place a comma after the word. Also read through your work to look for misspellings or comma splice errors
The story so far is good, but there are quite a few grammatical errors. For example, you frequently make comma splice errors. For instance, whenever you often place commas before and after words like about. Ex: "It was, about, 11 a.m." should be "It was about 11 a.m." Also, there were a few typos. I would read through the story a few more times so that you catch all the errors. Other than that, it's good and I can't wait to see where you're going with it.
I really really like this story and I can't wait to read what happens next. but I think that you should proofread a bit more carefully. There were a few misspellings and at one point you changed tenses. It's always helpful to read your work outloud to ensure that sentences flow correctly. Other than that, I have absolutely no complaints and I'm eager to read the next chapter.
This is such a nice story. And, really, it's true that animals can be more comfort than humans--especially dogs. With their steadfast loyalty and ability to sense that you're having a bad day, they are the perfect comforters. I really loved the story. It made me cry (which is a good thing, I assure you)
...wow...I absolutely love the descriptions in this piece. To me, this piece reflects the basic human need to care for someone, and be cared for in return. That basic human need that we sometimes wish we could deny. That basic human need that we often push to the side and hide from everyone else. So good for you. =)
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