Haha!
Generally, I don't like parodies (a lot of them make me angry) but this one made me laugh. I loved the puns on the names and 'The Prancing Phony'.
I thought this very original, and the verse was good, as you were under pressure to fit it to the story whilst simultaneously directing it down the humourous path. I do like the idea of the One Wing and the Nauseated (how did you get that from 'Nazgul'? Ha!).
Seriously, though, well done. And the large font made it easier to read: I do believe that you have attracted more reviewers by enlarging it.
You must want to kill me for writing such a hopeless review. Grr! I'm angry at myself. But you can't NOT like compliments ... can you?
Overall, a job very well done.
God bless,
Maeve :)
Riddle One: Dumbledore (full name Albus Percival Wulfric Brian Dumbledore)? Could you please tell me if I'm right or wrong?
Riddle Two: Hermione/Dumbledore again? Which one???
Riddle number one: Hermione (or - full name - Hermione Granger). One of Harry's two best friends. Smartest in the year, the only spell she ever has a problem with is the Patronus Charm. Her Patronus takes on the form of an otter. Her parents are both dentists. Her worst fear is failure.
Riddle number two: Hagrid (or - full name - Rubeus Hagrid). Hogwarts gamekeeper and Care of Magical Creatures teacher, Harry's biggest (literally) friend. Was expelled from Hogwarts in his third year, blamed for the opening of the Chamber of Secrets. Raised a Norwegian Ridgeback in his hut in Harry's first year; called it Norbert. Found out in Harry's fourth year that Norbert is a girl - now called Norberta. Has a black boarhound called Fang.
I realise this is closed, but it's fun to do, anyway. Thanks a whole lot, this was a great idea.
Cheers,
Maeve(:
Hey, this is Maeve - I told you I'd look at your portfolio.
Number One: Great writing. Amusing and very original.
Number Two: I love the idea of channeling magic through emotions.
Number Three: Do you like Harry Potter? (Sorry, a bit off-topic there ...)
Number Four: It was a really great beginning to a story, but I got a bit confused when I got to the part about the 'torture spells' - surely Sciss wasn't allowed to practise it on your character?
Number Five: Like I said, it's very good, so if you haven't finished it, keep writing, and if you have, write something else!
Cheers. (:
Wow - that is really a great story. It is moving, has underlying values and is original and inspirational. You have done a great job in writing this and you had better never stop, because with a gift like yours that would be a sin.
I loved your characters, I loved the plot, and I loved the morals you presented in the story's telling.
Keep writing, because you're amazing. (:
Very insightful and amusing simultaneously. Keep writing; you're doing perfectly fine. Okay, there was one spelling/grammar mistke I picked up, so if you want, you can change it: "Their eyes shined as they looked at one another." The word 'shined' should be changed to 'shone'; 'shined' is not a word.
You're doing very well. (:
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