oh that was hauntingly well written promise of rain in a fire filled land wonderful concept. Nice pace and soothing topic. Welcome to WDC. Keep writing Mirror.
Good piece, I like how you never fully say the word divorce only implied which I think shows a true mastery over your word craft (not sure if that is correct but I think it fits.) Either way I thoroughly enjoyed your piece thank you for sharing. Keep writing, Mirror.
Lovely simply lovely! I enjoyed your piece very much I love the many different elements you had contrasting things such as destructive and gentle. I also like your ending phrase. Well done newbie and welcome to WDC. Keep writing, Mirror.
Welcome to the WDC newbie, as a fellow tree lover sometimes huger, I found your piece read like a poetic musing. your pace was good and you topic was one a reader can relate to. Personally I always liked the more secretive side of trees but your expressions on the more softer side was very insightful. Good job! Keep writing, Mirror.
A lively poem that really captures the life of a lion in captivity. You did well bringing out the desires of the lion and where it stems from. You also have really good pace and flow. I found your piece quite enjoyable good work. Keep writing, Mirror.
I think you just unleashed a pack of wolves yourself. Wonderful work. I read about that kind of poem can't remember the actual name but it was pretty tricky and if I do recall you didn't have to rhyme though you did, and you did it swimmingly. Good job Thanks for sharing. Keep writing, Mirror.
Well done, your gift is in your word pictures. Though your rhyming and pace are equally as good. But the way you discribe the old mill house is like taking a trip there in your mind. I like your piece very much, it hits close to home since there is an old mill house I pass on my way to work each day. Thank you for sharing Good work. Keep writing, Mirror.
Aww I like walking in the moonlight. But I also like your storoem neat word by the way. I really like the pace of your piece. The only thing I saw which could also just be my inexperience was paragraph six was broken at an odd place. Happens to me when I edit all the time. Just my thought otherwise a lovely piece. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing, Mirror.
Five stars for the poem. If I had that skill in fifth grade things would be different. Your piece had good flow and the pace was good, The only thing I would suggest is that you break your piece up a bit into paragraphs. For several reasons one: makes your piece easier to read and two I found that it helps with sticky spots in a poem. just my opinion. Thanks for sharing, and welcome to WDC. Keep writing, Mirror.
Haunting. A sad topic most steer clear of but you dived head first. I admire your bravery. Your poem is well paced and thought provoking. You have done an amazing job creating a work that will stick with your reader a long time after you poem is read. As for critiques try breaking up you piece into paragraphs. It well lend more impact to your readers. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing, Mirror.
Beautiful, simply beautiful. You mastery over words their intricate tangles and loose webs leading your reader down a glimmering path filled with word pictures of love. As you can see I am simply consumed by your piece. I slightly envy the receiver of this poem. To be overwhelmed with such lyrical words of love. Well Done! Do me a favor keep writing PLEASE!!! Mirror.
Perfect!!! I think you did an excellent job on this piece. The poetry rhymes in a soothing way, your words ring true and cause your reader to not only believe but trust you. Your pace and length are really good and your theme is carried through out your piece. Plus its just beautiful. Good writing thanks for sharing. Keep writing, Mirror.
This is a good piece. One note you might want to check V2: The school year has come to "an" good end. I think the verse will work just as good without the (an). I know knit picking. Otherwise this is a good work. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing, Mirror.
Your piece is both beautiful and moving alternating between blissful and sad back to hope and maybe bliss. Well paced and all your thoughts were brought out fully. I really liked how your character was someone who was wronged but not a victim. I love your piece good work. Keep writing Mirror.
A poem about naked women that is not offensive Well Done. I really liked how you gave enough background information to imagine the scene, of a small group of girls just having fun. This piece really brings out a playful side to poetry and had me laughing through out. Well written and beautifully executed. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing, Mirror.
I have to admit for awhile you had me as confused as that poor husband. I had no idea where she was going. Was this a he said she heard thing, a missed engagement, what? But when she said that last sentence it all came clear. This story is a well pace perfectly executed piece of writing. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing. Keep writing please, Mirror.
I just couldn't wait a short story about your own personal muse a must read, and boy did I enjoy it Quex is quite a star. Spunky and quick witted a riveting reading kept me laughing beginning to end. You have created a real tangible character, a tall order for any writing. Well done cant wait to read more of your work. Keep writing, Mirror.
Aww I like this piece very much. The warmth and love you can almost see. Your length and flow are well proportioned and the theme is carried throughout the piece. A broken theme I must say has always been a pet peeve of mine. So in conclusion your piece is one of my favorites. Keep writing, Mirror.
Excellent work! No need to worry if he's not happy that's his problem. What I really liked in your piece is that you didn't just rhyme you were creative with your words mixing and matching such as "clock and wrought". Very lyrical, I loved your piece very much. Again I say excellent work! Keep writing. Mirror.
I think your Piece is good. It can be applied to many different things. It makes your reader think. And that is a good thing. For me your piece really struck a cord because it reminded me of a friend that I was once so close too, but now we have grown apart. I think many of your readers will apply your piece in different ways. Sorry I don't have a critique I like your piece the way it is. Keep writing Mirror.
Usually I review short works like poems and the like but your piece was well worth the extra time. You have a large imagination and it aids to a story that although short leaves an impression that won't be quickly forgotten. The only critique is you may want to re-read your piece and edit out the typos. There are not many though. From one newbie to another Good work! Mirror.
Good job. I always like a good empowerment story. The only thing you may want to do is re-read your piece there are a few typos and you might want to try dropping down a line after each paragraph. Doing so lends to an easier reading experience. I learned that during a writing course. So from one newbie to another, nice work. Mirror
Not bad I like the story of miss placed bravery that went so long just like the old adage in mountain climbing you can get it right a thousand times, it only matters the one time you get it wrong. I know its worded differently but I like my way better. And I like you work. The story line is well thought out and the theme is thoroughly carried throughout the piece nice job. Keep writing. Mirror.
Beautiful! You wrote that at nine years old, seriously? Wow the poems I wrote at nine have so many typos it would take J, Edgar Hoover to figure them out. I really like your flowing pace. And you managed to do at nine what a lot of people can't which is to keep the poem in harmony from beginning to end. Very enjoyable addition thank you for sharing. Mirror.
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