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Rated: E | (3.0)
These are just my opinions. Anyways, the story itself was good. I liked how you never once included the event that preceded you story, it gave an interesting feel. There were a few times where you spelled anti-conscience as anti-conscious, and there was the fourth sentence in the seventh paragraph that didn't really make too much sense to me, but I might just not get it. I loved the last sentence from the fifth paragraph, how you had it as though the view was slowly traveling upwards, and I think it would add to the suspense if instead of saying: 'like a ...' if you could say that it was the unrelenting bull, make a metaphor instead of a simile. If you could read any of my work and give me some feedback, I would appreciate it. Overall, good story.
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