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Review of Gossip  Open in new Window.
Review by littlered Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
And Stuart is just the cat's meow - what in the world does that mean? Needs to be reworded.

Bertha really couldn't stop thinking about her chair and really wanted Martha to leave quicker than a hungry cheetah who was running after his prey in the wild on a hot summer day in the middle of July. - Needs rewording because it sounds like a run on sentence.

Alright how old are these girls because the way they talk makes them sound like teenagers. But the way Bertha talks about her bean bag chair makes her sound like a 4 year old.

I would have liked to have more details about Stuart and Maude.

Overall it was ok.
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Review of Separation  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This was a really good poem although it was hard to follow at some points. This also had great details in it which helped understand the poem when I was confusd.

I like how you made this so relatable when a guy breaks up with you (or girl for you) and you don't want to let him go.

The one part i didn't like was "Hold on tight to my tongue" that was just gross.

Overall it was really good.
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Review by littlered Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
It was a good poem, but I kind of get bored with all of the rhyming.

It's a very sad poem but i can relate to it a lot. I just wish you made the poem a little more interesting.
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Review by littlered Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
What are caresses? This confused me a lot.

I liked how you described what seemed like a person's first day on their honeymoon and excited but scared about the night to come.

I liked how you made me picture the setting with all of the descriptions.
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Review of Right Now  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really liked this because it can show how a person can have such a strong beleif that God is always with but you have doubts.

I liked how you put your beliefs in bold and not your doubts. It showed me which one is stronger for you.

I also like how someone finally put a poem or whatever about this.

What I liked most was that this was unique and different from others.
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Review by littlered Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
This is very short but it's ok.

The one word I didn't understand is queagerly. What does that mean.

I aslo didn't know cats liked birds.
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Review of Misunderstood  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Is the title for the boss because he wants to be something that no one knows about?

I like how the story gets more interesting as you get closer to the ending.

About a week later I was working one Friday night when my former ex boss came in. I am sure the bank would have loved to know the true side of him since I couldn’t express myself there. Needless to say, a few weeks later we were coworkers! - My favorite part because it's hilarious.

I like how you made me laugh and be grossed out at the end which I think you wanted to do.
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Review of Epiphany  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
my thoughts imagine things - It would be better if you had said i daydream of things

i think the title fits kind of well. Although I think something you could have came up with something different. Epiphany to me means you just found out something, not constantly asking questions.

The poem does make me want to look at the world more closely. I do think you wnated to make me feel this way.

But listen and pay attention
Because we'll probably absorb some of life's greatest lessons..
My favorite lines.
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Review of Siren song  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Cursed treasure you may find,
but greed disruptures all mankind.
Does this mean their greed make them ignore the deathly rocks of the shores they're entering?

Then with death the truth betold,
earth again takes all the gold.
Is it saying people's death gives the earth its gold because of they will decompose?
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