The only way to offer such a perspective is to be there and claim it. At fifteen, I lived what you just wrote...so I know where you're coming from. Did you know that the melancholy and depressed faction of the earth are the most artistically blessed ones? You have the gift...(what I referred to as the "curse" when I partook of its fruit to exercise my own inner demons)...so please use your gift often, and expose that gift to others around you. You will (or not) be surprised that doing so will open new doors for you and your shadow will not be such an odious cross to bear. I look forward to seeing great things from you in the future! Thank you for sharing!
This piece is greatly philosophical and leads only to more questions...in what I call a "fatal circle." One conclusion inevitably leads to the next...and so on...I think you get the picture. The obvious intent of this work is to make people THINK, and that is what I find wonderful about your efforts here. Not important is the final conclusion drawn; just the process of challenging our own beliefs within our own cultural perspectives...or else strengthening an already determined position. If you would have made me mad...you should have been estatic. If you would have found a fellow-believer in your philosophical viewpoint...you should have been elated. That's the one driving force behind a philosophical piece...and you did that to perfection. Check your grammatical errors, though...because perfectionists are the primary readership of philosophy...and if the grammar suffers, so does the validity of your claims. Nonetheless, I appreciate your efforts and look forward to finding your work on the static page sometime soon!
You're a poet. Nothing else should be said. Your ryhme and meter is nearly impeccible (there are syllabic flaws - just to be overly picky), your visual acuity is amazing (but what is E?), and I felt the weight of your concept as heavy as a fifteen pound sledge hammer - dropped on my head from five additional feet above. The piece was also emotionally provocative - almost to the point where I know way more than I want to. Then again, that's what true poetry is all about! Keep writing, future poet laureate!
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