How sad but true. I like the way you showed the ups and downs. The turmoil a person faces whether they see it or not. It makes me wonder, what is it about "crystal" that makes some of us go down that dark and winding road. I for one am glad to say that I never felt the need to go down that road. How I wish those who does could find their way back. Although it shows a dark side in our lives. I am glad you wrote this piece. I would not change a word. Looking forward to reading more of your writing.
Wow. That was some present. It took me back to my own childhood in the Philippines. Although during those times, normally only one or two neighborhood kids would have one. However, whether we were family or friends. We always shared with each other. I remember the bike that I learned to ride, however, I don't remember whose it was.
I learned to ride across the street from my house on the basketball courts. My older cousin was teaching me how to ride. I was fine until she told me she let go. Of course I looked behind me and fell. But I remember getting back up and riding until I got tired. Thank you for sharing and the trip down memory lane.
I would not change a thing. I look forward to reading more of your items.
I enjoyed reading your piece. I would love to hear the song. If or when you put the music to the lyric. I would not change a thing. The words flow together. It shows the ups and downs of a man's love for a woman and the chase that follows. I look forward to reading some more of your writing.
I enjoyed it, gives you a lot to think about. Isn't that the question of the century? Why not enjoy life? STOP! Take our time and smell the flowers. Watch the sunrise over the clouds. Listen to the birds chirping. The waves rolling in and out the shore. Why run to the end? Enjoy the living. Yes life is not always rays of sunshine, but it doesn't mean we shouldn't stop and smell the roses. I wouldn't change a thing.
I enjoyed this piece. It takes me back to my years when I worked as a CNA in nursing homes. It brought me lots of joy to work with the elderly. I though that it would be my vocation for the rest of my years. However, now I find myself working around children. I realize during that time of my life that is where I should be. Now, I work at the other spectrum. I enjoyed working with my elderly patients and help them live and smile. I never realized how much more I would love working around children. I love being a part of their childhood and hope that my presence in their lives will help them develop to great people. I feel that sometimes nurses are not given the recognition they should get. I wouldn't change a thing.
What a small but mighty weapon we yield when we pick up a pen or pencil to write with. I love your piece. It shows us how the pencil is stronger than a sword. Where would us writers be without our writing instruments. I love this piece. It's simple but yet says a lot. I wouldn't change a thing. Keep on writing.
I enjoyed your piece. I wouldn't change a thing. I could feel the love the person felt. The ups and downs. My heart goes out to them for their love was not being returned. It shows how wise the character is to finally understand that the person's feelings were not true. Deserve more from a person who claims to love you. Actions speaks louder than words. Continue to walk out in the world and find the person you're fated to be with. I wouldn't change a word.
I love it. Hopefully there are more teachers out there that would take this approach. Imagine how it would have gone if she took the other road most people probably would. I wouldn't change a word. I look forward to reading more of your work.
As a person who works at a school. I would say for me I pick on site work. Although I love spending time alone in my office. However, being alone all day every day doesn't fulfill me. I enjoyed reading it and weighing the pros and cons for myself. LOL. Continue writing. I wouldn't change a thing.
Omg. This is the best so far. Reminds of when my daughter was in elementary school. My husband worked at the school and played Santa every year. It stopped on my daughter's first year at the school.
They took the kindergarten class to see Santa. When it was her turn. My husband said, "Ho. Ho. Ho. What do you want for Christmas."
She goes, "Santa? But Daddy, you and mom already bought my presents. LOL. My husband was no longer Santa Claus after that year.
I loved this piece so much. It's brought me back to the good old days. I look forward to reading more of your items.
I enjoyed this piece. I wouldn't change a thing. I feel the same exact way. Love yourself the way you are. No matter what any one else thinks. Look forward to reading more of your work.
So true. The thing for us to do. To live our lives as if nothing else matter. Forget the scars and focus on the love and peace we deserves. And the family and friends we love. I loved your piece. Hope to read more of your writing.
I loved your piece. We should all be like a butterfly and be free in the world. Spread our wings, leave behind our young and we continue to live through our children and theirs. Nature is one constant in our lives. After we are long and gone. The trees, nature will continue on. I look forward to reading more of your items.
I enjoyed reading your story. It's true how precious life is. We should live for today and tomorrow. And spread love and joy to the world. Life is short not to enjoy every day of it. I look forward to reading more of your writing.
As I read your story. It reminded me of my own mother and the story she gave us about her and my dad. We lost her a few years ago. I miss the stories and the shopping spree they used to take me and my siblings. I wrote about it myself a few months ago. My father tells me everyday how much he misses her. He's taken over telling me the story. I hold on to these days tightly afraid to let go. It's a sweet sentiment to our parents here and gone. Keep on writing.
I genuinely enjoyed this piece. I always say mother knows best. I'm happy to read that in the end the young man listened to his mother, and they got out of a sticky situation and are unharmed and safe. Even though I'm sure the young man was vexed at the time. I'm sure in the end he was elated. I wouldn't change a thing. Lesson here is listen to your mom.
Thank you for the laugh, I needed that. I enjoyed your piece tremendously. It sounded so serious at first. I love the way you made it appear as if the couple stole something so expensive. Only to find out at the end it was donuts. I would not change a word. The dramatic effects were awesome and what a comedic ending.
I enjoyed your piece. I loved looking out the window and seeing snowflakes come down. Especially during the holidays. My family throwing snowballs at each other. Going sledding at the local park. Oh the good old days. Thank you for the trip to the past. Now, no more snowstorms, no more hot chocolate while looking out the window. No more Snowballs, instead it's the heat of the Florida sun, and hurricanes. Thanks again for the walk down memory lane. I wouldn't change a word.
I enjoyed your piece. It's joyful and melancholy at the same time. I truly hope that the person doesn't fall into the category of a beautiful tragedy. There are too many things in this world that bring us joy. Butterflies, sounds of birds, children playing, spending time with family. Although it makes me somewhat sad, I wouldn't change a word.
I enjoyed your story. I work as a head custodian in a school i my area. So, this hit home for me. It's exactly how I expect my custodians to work. With pride and do it right. You have to have pride in your work. Especially working with children. The ending was unexpected, but it has quite a punch in the end. I wouldn't change a thing. It's said that my school was once an Indian burial ground. At times I've heard voices, or a person whistling. One of my custodians has heard sounds of someone hitting the hallway carpet on a railing, but no one is outside. You should check out my story called "Our Neighborhood Ghost. You might like it.
LOL. That last line was hilarious. I know exactly how she feels, I always think that the night ends too quickly for me. When that sun comes up all I want to do is put my blanket over my head. The story has a good flow. I couldn't help but picture myself in her place. This is exactly how I feel about my husband. He's my soulmate. I wouldn't change a thing.
This was so much fun to read. I figured it was a dog after a few sentences. Omg. That sentence about hiding the second sock was adorable. I found it so cute, I had to read it to my daughter. She loved it. It's on spot on how a pet would feel whenever they're left alone. Hmmm I've always wondered where the socks disappear to. It was a cute and loving small story. I wouldn't change a thing.
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