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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hey! I really enjoyed the concept of the story and descriptions. The main thing is that I was confused about what the transformarian ball is. It doesn't clearly explain it, so maybe give a brief description/hint at what it is? Also I would suggest describing the main character a little bit more detailed in the beginning even though I understand it was likely that you didn't want to give away that he was a Mage right away. My favorite was how smoothly you made the dialogue go which I see a lot of people struggle with. Thanks for sharing!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This sounds fascinating! I'm not sure if I should have been expecting the ending twist, but I wasn't. I love how you describe the situations, but one thing I would suggest is possibly adding more detail to the characters. I hope you'll continue this!
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