I love this begining to what could be a great book. I was given just enough information to intregue me, and make me want more. I love the way the plot is unfolded and I want to read more. I am an avid scifi reader, and this is someething that I would love to read in it's complete form. My only critizen is sometimes the prose are heavily worded, such as the phrase "Regardless of whatever cause, whatever insult" or "Not that she would have spared any woman, had they been involved" Maybe these phrases and others in the work could use less to make them more, such as "Regardless of the cause, or the insult" or "Not that she would have spared a woman, had one been involved."
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