All I can say is WOW! I clicked on the link because of the title: Daring Greatly. I immediately connected with the idea of doing some thing big and wildly beyond my capacity. To be honest, Western stories and especially stories 200 years removed would never have gotten my attention, but something about your story drew my attention and rivited me to the scene of the old man in his final dying days and the emotions of the drama you conveyed.
If my writing can grab the person who does not venture into a certain genere like yours did for me, then I shall have done well.
Job well done, my friend. Keep up the not good, but great writing!
Wow! to be honest I have not read the entire chapter, but I do intend to get to it. But based one the what I have read so far you have a knack for transcending space and time. I absolutely loved the opening dream, and to tell you the truth I had a hard time believing that you did not actually experience that horrible moment.
I have lived the abused life in foster care and in a juvenile teenage home, so the dramatic discription is very realistic. I want to book mark this chapter for later reading. I am heading to bed now and cannot devote the quality time to read the full chapter. In the mean time if you like I have a few items posted here at Writing.com. If you like take a look at Morning Thoughts of Jesus, Joy To the World, and the other two writing I have here are the beginnings of a novel I am working on as well. Any thoughts on these items will be deeply appreciated. Also I have one published novel at www.eugenecoghill.com Title is Love Is A Fishnet
Take care and keep on writing, stay encouraged.
Till next time,
Hello, Yellow Rose my name is Eugene Coghill. First of all let me say that in my opinion this is a very emotional and direct appeal that causes one to think about our immediate surroundings. I was immediately drawn into the scene outside and could visualize myself seeing the meadows and the countless insects that would have otherwise gone unnoticed.
You have excellent descriptive wording. Truly this was written in free flow of thought and probably came very easily for you. No doubt I will take a moment to ponder my surroundings and take in some of the beauty that I take for granted.
I can only hope that some of my own personal writing can draw on emotions as well as this poem does. If you care to take a look at my portfolio, there you will find a couple of items that is intended to do just that. If you would like to take the time to read and perhaps review I would hope that it moves you in the same way your poem has touched me.
Please keep writing, and if this is the work you love, may you never stop.
Hello Lisa, again this is Eugene Coghill. I am very delighted that you posted this item. My overall impression is that you are skilled with putting together good rhymes and still hit your mark with the articulate thought. I am not much of a poem reader because often my mind has to put all the words in a sequence that makes since to me and see the story as a whole.
But this piece has the emotional grip that allows me to feel the story and not just visualize it. Very few people can do that. May I ask is this something that you experience personally and was writing this a way to deal with that dramatic time in your life?
I am sure that an English major could point out some errors with this writing, but for me it is well written and if anyone can get me to read peoetry without it reading like poetry, that is a job well done.
I like the title, even though I have to wonder did you stop and think how this could be a huge play on words? I think you hinted to it in this line, Tomorrow's not forever and forever isn't now.
Very interesting and do please continue to write in the inspiration and religious sector as you see fit. Your work will move others to stop and think about the precious thing we take for granted called life.
I absolutely love this piece, as it is very concise and on point. I think anyone regardless of actual religious convictions or views can appreciate the beauty of this writing. I must say you are gifted in the area to bring all the important view of a very complex subject, to the forefront of the human consciousness.
I do have a question however as what exactly inspired you to write this piece? Was it a burning question from deep within or something else?
Eugene Coghill
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