Your message is clear. I enjoyed your poem overall; however, you may want to correct the spelling errors in your work so to not deviate from the point of the poem. I like you use of protraying Earth as a balencer, using the duel malviolence and beneviolence of nature. Might I suggest a little detail as what we are doing to nature to make the poem hit home, not distent Items like factories, but everyday things descibed in a poetic manner? Thanks for the wonderful read.
This is simply beautiful. The very exhilaration expirenced (or pain of the intangable) that inspires art, this muse, that makes the emotion come alive on paper is simply beautiful. And while I don't know if your dreams inspire art like this, muse is always with us. Like a soul, it may never be touched, but it shall always be there. Keep regathering these moments of excitiment in your work.
Best of luck, kichiki (aka Clay)
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