How is a Fine melody made of this mess?
Will love Offer these words to your lips
Where sorRrow has found its bitter carress?
Why not Grin through it, put hands on your hips?
this part flows so well....I love it. It is difficult to build a poem around such a rigorous structure and pull it off without making it look like you wrote down the words...."Freedom of Forgiveness" and filled a poem in around it.
So make it all flow so easily...:
try:
Friends aren't the ones who cheer on the hate
Discard the pain, it's never too late
Despair can be vanquished; fear relinquished
As you breathe "I forgive you today."
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