A bit off topic, but most animals actually have a natural instinct to from birth to kill there siblings from birth if they're deformed in anyway to save them a life of suffereing. For example, my 8th year biology class had chicken eggs and we were waiting for them to hatch and when they did hatch(luckily in school hours) one was deformed slightly, and the others proceeded to peck it to death, even after separating it it still just died.
I get that the message of this is that bullying is pointless, but sometimes i wander if its any different from those little chicks. And believe me, I know bullying sucks, I was bullied everyday for my first 7 years of schooling. Coming home with a new bruise everyday and I can safely say it changed who I am today as an adult, and not for the better.
So I guess, in a way, every species has bullying in there DNA it's just not everyone can hold back when someone else is clearly weaker. Its just how life is. Its just how nature is.
As for the writing itself, I liked it. I'm not one for grammar (as you can probably tell by now) but I really like the rhyming keep up the good work.
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