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Review of The Color of Jade  Open in new Window.
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Review by Kay Bee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really love how you managed to catch the duality of innocence and intelligence. Jade is not stupid by any means but you tell her age through every word. Being fifteen is hard enough without having to handle rifles. Your very true to soul descriptions make her believable and also lovable. I hate when you're reading a story and it takes forever (if ever) to actually gain empathy for the characters. You come right out of the gate with your character building and I really appreciate that.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
It's crazy to me that someone else feels this way. Nay, that someone is able to capture the monotany (spell check?) of it all. It's a lonely and frustrating feeling. I seem to always have bad timing. I feel that wall you speak of and at some point in the relationship, after pushing away as hard as I can from the other person, the wall just drops. No real warning... It just falls away without my permission. And by the time I'm ready to trust... To fully love... They're so far away from me that I will never catch them. I wish I knew how to erase that process. I suppose some of us are just lone creatures. Perhaps damaged or too cautious, whatever the reasoning that this happened to you... Maybe she just didn't fit... I just feel like you captured the moments very well. Almost even how they seem to just blur together into a wad of time you spent with someone... And in my case, you just go off and do it again. Very lovely piece.
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