I love the choppiness of this. It gives it a very empty tone. There are a few things I didn't personally like. For it to be so short and choppy, don't repeat words, it takes away from the poem.
I don't really care for this. It's very simple and choppy. The same idea isn't incorporated so it doesn't flow very well. It has an understandable potential. It's just not portraid good.
"And they say when you fall in love, that you forget the stuff in your past and focus on the future you will have with them," I also completley agree with this line.
It's very hard to see the negative when you love someone, whether it is in a relationship or with family, sometimes even friend. There are some things I didn't really care for in this but its all a matter of opinion. Good work.
There were some things that had a choppy flow. However, I enjoyed your word choices and phrases. This story gave a sense of suspence, which I loved. Good job!
This poem makes me want to cuddle up and go to sleep or watch a movie. Great work with words! I get chills just thinking about the cold weather. It was very simple and easy to understand and relate to.
This poem is short and choppy, but very deep. The only suggestion I can give is to maybe reword some things instead of constantly using the phrase "and how.." it gives it a repetitive flow. However, I still loved it!
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