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Review of Cycle of life  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is interesting: Sad and hopeful and beautiful all at once. Thank you...

sweet rosebud awakes
touching the suns morning light
shadows surrender
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Review of Her Crooked Smile  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
THis is cool. I don't know how to critique it, because it is just about perfect.

Thank you.
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Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting approach:

If it were presented in screenplay format, I might think—Sitcom.

The setting is Caveman community. Not Hunter-Gatherer clan, but an organized society. Replete with commerce, politics, communications and concepts not often associated with the accepted dogma of the prehistoric, Stone Age, cave dweller.

On occasion, this apparent dichotomy could draw my willing suspension of disbelief out of the cave, and I would find myself reminding myself that it was designed as tongue in cheek. Then, just as deftly, the narrative would cleverly pull me back into character. And once again I was hooked.

The tale isn’t entirely original (but then, what is). However, the spin of your delivery is altogether creative and the story is very well crafted and executed. And, the experience was immensely entertaining.

Overall, I found the adventure quite pleasurable and refreshing. Which, I assume, was the intent all along.

It’s a big clubs up from me.

Looking forward to reading more from you.

Thank you...
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Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This is fun.

Last line in first stanza: Their freedom from the reigns.

Did you mean rein, as in a long narrow strap and bit? Or reign, as in holding royal office?

Guess it could work either way.


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Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Only in the dark-web night:

This is a well crafted, cool little tale. Every word is perfectly matched. If there is a complaint, it is that it is so short.

Think I will fan you, if that is okay, see if there may be a sequel.

Thank you …
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Review of Joe's  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shades of The Twilight Zone, episode 64, 05/26/1961:

A cool tale. Nice sense of low-key suspense throughout. Believable dialog. Good imagery.

There’s a Joe’s near here. Don’t frequent, but from now on will steer clear, passing by on the opposite side of the street.

Thank you …
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Review of Grey and Black  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Grey and Black

Another wonderfully crafted poem. Sad.

Think I will fan you, if that is okay.

Thank you …
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Review of 2am  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
02:01 ...

First, grammatically:

“So quietly most ‘has’ no idea” is “So quietly most ‘have’ no idea”

And, I think the last line reads better in present tense:

“2am ‘was’ the time to be alive” as “2am ‘is’ the time to be alive”

That aside:

This is a nicely crafted poem. Great atmosphere (no pun). Good feeling. Fabulous imagery. I like it.

Thank you …
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Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
From my perspective, this plays more like a dream than a story. A dream I vaguely recall having experienced myself.

Not that I know this tale. Rather, that I seem to remember, during a dream that is slowly but inexorably receding into fog, having in some way been temporarily flipped out of this existence into some other. Met with strangers that weren’t strangers. Others that knew me, and were gauging and recording responses. And, guiding me back to somewhere more familiar.

Perhaps this is an innate thing? Something shared in our fractal DNA?

Anyway: I really liked this narrative. As stated above, it touched something within myself. A remembering.

The plot flows evenly. The scenery is realistic. The protagonist is believable. The resolution, a learning.

Looking forward to sampling more of your offerings.

Thank you …
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Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is fun. I want more.

Thank you ...
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Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
So, I take it this poem is penned from the perspective of the shadow. With that in mind:

The shadow seems … lonely. There is no one or anything in the world except the object of the shadow’s attachment—over which the shadow has no control: No friends; no playmates; no one in whom to confide secrets, or ask for help, or simply feel comforted. No identity of his/her/its own. Not even the being that hosts the shadow pays much, if any, attention.

Yet, a shadow is not invisible—as long as there is light. And, shadow’s can certainly be playful in their casting. And, everything casts a shadow, when the light is right—so s/he/it is never really alone.

Question: Why is the protagonist so sad?

This is well written. It conveys a great deal of emotion.

One nit: I think over head is one word—overhead.

Well, two nits actually. The line, “over head of me,” feels awkward. Like it wants to be “over my head” or something. But, that does not fit the rhyme scheme. I have no suggestions, just an opinion. Perhaps it is okay the way it is.

Otherwise, this is great. I will definitely read more.

Thank you …
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Review of forgive me  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is well written. The meaning is clear. It maintains rhythm throughout. Evokes emotions. Asks for forgiveness.

There is only one question: If the character knows s/he is behaving inconsiderately, why doesn’t s/he remedy the situation rather than attempting to excuse?

My 2¢

I will certainly be sampling more of your art.

Thank you …
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Review of Due Dates  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
In this day and age, it would seem fairly difficult to meet prospective partners whilst riding in a horse and buggy.

That said, I have to agree: The immaterial, black and white, social media approach to friendship and love (and most everything else) appears … devoid.

But, that’s an opinion. And one that, for me anyway, is unfounded, as I have little experience from which to draw.

I’ll take your word for it. And, instead, say this:

Your poem is well written. I will be sampling some more.

Thank you …
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Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is well written.

I enjoyed it. It seemed somehow uplifting, even though it also seemed sad.

And it’s interesting that the burro appears to be the wiser of the pair.

Thank you …
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Review of Kevin Locke  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is nice. It paints a beautiful word canvas, lifting off the written page, flowing into our humble hearts.

The good thing about cultures rooted in wisdom and strength is that they cannot be destroyed—no matter how hard the opposition tries.

One wonders how this one will fair when the time comes.

Thank you, Tokada …
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Review of Train of Thought  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was (I want to say fun, but it’s a sad subject) a good read. It doled out information in bits and pieces—in good mystery form. I did not see the end coming. In fact, I was surprised when the drunk called Ellie by her name.

Then I was (I don’t know the correct word to describe my feelings), well … the last few lines got me.

Thank you …
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Review of Gold  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This has an interesting rhythm, which is maintained throughout.

An exposé of the interconnectedness of us all—especially where two people are sharing their lives.

The patchouli scent won’t get out of my head, now.

Otherwise, great. Thank you …
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Review of Beauty Is ...  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is great!

Never seen this type of visual structure before. It is interesting.

And the poetry is beautiful.

Thank you ...
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Review of The Sandman  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ah … nothin’ like a lil’ mornin’ voodoo to get the juices flowin’.

This is a cool story: Just light enough that it is not too much to swallow. Just different enough to keep one on one’s toes throughout. A lesson: Truth, withheld, can indeed hurt; or, never take a beautiful woman (or ones earthly gifts) for granted.

Thank you for this. Much better than coffee to open the sleepy eyes …
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Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I love this. It has everything: Beginning, middle, end. Boss characters. Cool settings. Humor. Racism. Sexism. Ambition. Politics. The Con and the Conned. The promise. The lie. The protagonist having all her wishes granted. But with blinders. And a price …

Thank you …
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Review of Kayla  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Saw a news article that claimed dogs are being taught to communicate using a board of buttons they can push to convey a message.

Yours speaks in so many other, more organic channels …
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Review of First  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Ambition. I think you nailed it.

Yet, so many might aspire to write so well.

Do some more …
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Review of Antics  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is fun and silly and shred. And I can’t get it out of my head.

The only things missing are a few apostrophes here and there.

Cool!
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Review by Julian Lee Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting!

Short. But, I do like the woke-up-and-can’t-quite-remember motif.

Oh, yeah … that creepy guy from the bar last night …
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