Hello Joto! I found your story on the Please review me page. Overall I enjoyed the story. I really felt engaged with Sven from the moment the story first began.Especially when he kept to his own morals against Orekhan The setting and mood fit the plot perfectly. Overall, great story!
Hello Chester, I came across this story in the read & review section. I really liked it!. As I was reading the story I could clearly hear the characters voices in my head. The man sounding confident and speaking with a lot of excitement. Only for his scam to be found out, and he had to quickly make an escape. Overall, great story!
This was a great story! I enjoyed reading it a lot. As a kid i watched and read a lot of Goosebumps and this story reminded me of some of the scenarios. It was engaging throughout and a suspenseful ride throughout. Perhaps the only thing I would work on would be the dialogue formatting. If you space out the characters dialogue separate from everything else that is going on it makes the story look more clean, rather than clumped up. It also can help increase the readers immersion as well because there eyes can better follow what is going on. Overall, great story!
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