I like this poem but the full meaning is a little vague. I thought you could use more description because there wasn't much. I like the line "then we say goodbye and now your my past" it was a very good line that I felt had a deeper meaning than the rest of the poem. Keep up the good work girl!!
I liked this poem and some of the description used in the poem. I thought you could maybe use a little more description but other than that this was a decent poem. I liked that you used slang throughout the poem instead of in small parts. This poem was enjoyable and relatable. I like the line "The deafening roar of the crowd the buzzer sounds". Keep up the good work!
I think the poems really cute and mushy. I like the description although it could use a little bit more throughout the poem. I like the line "You are the source of gravity that draws me close". There are a few things I would fix but other than small things like a little repetition I though it was really good. Keep up the good work!
This poem was really good! I liked the strong word choices used throughout the poem. I liked the description and I could really picture what was happening. I really like the line "It feels like moss, slowly crawling across your unmoving skin; as it covers a planted stone". Your a really good writer, keep up the good work!
I liked the poem, it was enjoyable to read! I liked the poem because it encourages you to be you and you'll do great things. There wasn't very strong word choices but it can be a good thing because it makes it more understanding to all ages. I like the line "Your heart is a vast ocean" because I don't really see that comparison on a day to day basis. Great work!
I liked the symbolism used throughout the poem. The poem was sort of vague and confusing until I got to the end to it. I think that when it say that she is dead she is talking about her need for love and that she is heartbroken. The poem was repetitive in some of the stanzas. I also like the layout of the poem, it made it easy to read and understand.
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