Wow, this is awesome! This is a fun and humorous story to read, where you take something many people fear and turn it into almost something to look forward too. The POV is perfect for this piece, and you manipulate that tone to the best effect. Spelling and punctuation are good as far as I am concerned, and really, the only suggestion for improvement that I have is to decrease the amount of spacing between each paragraph as it tends to be a bit distracting the way it is now. I loved it!
Hello, it was my pleasure to review your item! This is amazing, you have a great plot in this piece, that was interesting enough to keep me transfixed all the way until the end. Your characters are realistic and thus believable, grammatics are good as well! I think that this is a great start to a book, I look forward to reading more chapters of it in the future. I loved it!
Fantastic! This is an amazing story, what you have written about William, I love the WAY that you have it written, there is just something about your style that really makes the work stand out. The plot was amazing, a happy tale, turnind sad, and then ending on a fairly bright note, with the boy being optimistic. Grammatics are good, I saw no misspelled words, and your punctuation is where it should be. All in all, great job!
Wow, this is an awesome song! I've never really written any songs, but you are great at it. This flows along nicely, with no stumbles to interrupt things. Grammatics are good as well, which is important considering you are presenting your piece in a written format. All in all, I see nothing that I would change in this piece. I look forward to reading more of yoru work!
Wow, this is a fantastic poem! You tell a story with these lines that is very powerful and a bit surprising, I had no idea what would happen until the very end, so you pulled that off nicely. You rhyme is followed well, with all the used words working for one another. Grammatics are good as well, your punctuation and spelling needing no corrections. In fact, about the only thing I have left to say is-I loved it!
Great work~! This was a very heartfelt piece, that those freinds should be proud to receive. It was interesting, reading about yrou beliefs, even if they are wrong, and the poem at the end was a big bonus. You have set things out in a way that is easily understood, there is no mistaking where you stand, but this is done in a friendly and reserved manner. I noticed no mistakes are far as grammatics go, and applaud you for writing such a great letter.
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, and the poem at the end was a big bonus. You have set things out in a way that is easily understood, there is no mistaking where you stand, but this is done in a friendly and reserved manner. I noticed no mistakes are far as grammatics go, and applaud you for writing such a great letter.