Very emotional poem indeed . I like the flow. I got goosebumps reading the last stanza ;) . I totally enjoyed your work though it has some grammatical errors.You would've probably not noticed them, please correct them when you find time.
And Please find some time to review my works too ,it is a discouraging sight for me to see that no one is reviewing mine.Thanks for sharing ,keep sharing,keep in touch.
A good inspirational poem.I just want to make some suggestions. Make sure that you format your poem in such a way that it should be pleasant for the readers eyes.Try to work on rhyme scheme to make it even more attractive.Thanks for sharing your work and keep sharing .Thank you .
You descriptions about your girl friend is indeed sweet.But try to make your poem a little more elaborate,little more descriptive for example you could describe about the her characters, describe about her cute mannerisms and stuffs like that. Good work keep sharing .
Hi! Khaki.I enjoyed reading your poem.Thanks for the poem though it had some cons in them.even though the poem was fine try to give it more clarity , make sure that your poem is little more specific.Try to work some rhyme scheme too and make the poem more powerful and influential.Apart from that i liked your poem.thank you .
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