Great poem. I felt the essence of this local waterfall was brought out in your description. How this place enticed you through your senses(seeing rainbows in the mist or to feel nature's coolest breath) was able to make me remember a similar place in my hometown. Great imagery.
Although, I have to ask what a gull is in pertaining to your poem because as far as I know, there is no definition for gull in pertaining to a waterfall or water.
Thank you again.
Thank you for such a sweet poem. I do not have many edit points for you with the exception of the lead in to the final 2 stanzas.
Your poem sounded so sweet, almost as if it was a prayer being said to your one. In the final 2 stanzas, it makes it sound if you are leaving your child. I am not sure if that is the case but when you suggest "I will have taken flight" and "I will hang the stars up in the sky. Watching over and protecting you when your day is done" suggests to me that you will be leaving her and going to heaven.
For me, I would have used the title, "A Mother's Prayer" because the poem basically sounded like a prayer. The only time you made a promise was in the last two sentences. I definitely give you an A+ for effort and I could sense the love for your child in your words.
Very enjoyable. I especially appreciate the style which is not indicative to the normal type of poetry which includes stanzas. A really great flow and style. Thank you.
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