First off I must say that I am an agnostic and I must state that; "I could adjust the above argument to suit the agnostic position by concluding that without scientific evidence there is no way to know for certain that God exists, but the reasoning is essentially the same." is not essentially the same.
I did read through your entire article, but I can no way agree with everything you said. I can admit that it was well written and flattered people into believing what you said. The sentence; " My grandmother ate chicken and cheese puffs until she didn’t know where all the cheese puffs went to." was a great way to grab readers attention from normal viewpoint focused on in your story. At the start I would think that many people would be turned off your article by the grammar you used. This is in no way a bad thing, but I think that this was an ingenious way to suck people in.
One thing I must say to this though is that; "Like an illusionist you warped the perspectives of the people that read this story. You used cause and effect to gradually changes a person's thinking. You went from stating science cannot be explained supernaturally and if so God is illogical to God is Logical. I think this was great, but at the same time I'm firm in my belief that there is no way of knowing if God exists. The whole point of religion is to have 'Faith'. I don't have 'Faith' therefore I cannot be religious."
I liked your article and I believe it was extremely well written. If you want to reply to what I said; take a stab at me I don't mind.
Basically, I like the poem, but I don't think it was meant to be a song.
The haven you speak of is a great thing for you, yet many people in the world cease to exist in a place with a "Garden". Our problems are futilely expressed through poems and stories. In this time of acceptance and "peace" talk there is never anything done. We have politicians that say "We have to stop terror or it's a shame so many brave soldiers die".The truth of the matter is that they don't care. They only care when election time comes and for what reason. They lie about ending the war or created a peace filled nation. In the end the politicians mouth is used for nothing more then spreading false hope.
I've always loved the Haiku form of poetry. It's quick, expressive, and hard to write. I'm guessing that this poem is about husbands and wives? Betrayal of their vows with careless affairs? I didn't understand the poem full well but I think that's part of it's beauty
While I can't say that I agree with all of your statements it is a brilliantly written poem. The first two stanzas rhyme with each other every line down, which is very interesting and a hard feat at that. The rhythm throughout the entire thing was also stunning. It kept me interested the first time down when I didn't completely understand what you were saying. I understood the general meaning, but I had to re-read it in order to pick out all the tiny details.
The imagery and symbolism was really brought out throughout the entire poem. It's what kept me interested all the way down. I appreciate this form of writing, since I try to use a lot of imagery when I write a piece.
Overall, I thought that this poem was very good and well thought out. I hope to check more of your work out in the future.
Always,
Sean.
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