Really enjoyed reading this. When I first started reading I thought it seemed a bit rushed but as I read on I realised this was intentional and it really works, you haven't overloaded it with information, its just facts and it works for this. The story really made me think about technology and how it can go too far, and I wonder that something like this might actually be possible. I also noticed how the main character is reluctant to follow the trend but goes along with it anyway, which is interesting as in some ways I can relate. A very stimulating item to read! Thank you
I love the characters, they all seem to just fit, even if they don't fit together personality-wise (I don't know yet) they just seem perfect somehow. And I love the names they all have. Anyway, off to read chapter three, thanks, once again I enjoyed reading this :)
Aww, very sweet, made me feel all tingly at the love between them. Not silly love though because he throws a pillow at her, showing they can be fun and sensible too. A sad ending but at least they had time for the miracle of speech before hell arrived, as you put it. Thanks, I enjoyed reading this :)
Oo I am intrigued to know more...is there going to be any more or just leaving it there? If you do write more, I'd love it if you'd let me know so I can read it. The woman seems quite scary and I want to know more about her and her story, and also to know more about the narrator. Thanks, I enjoyed reading this :).
I thought this story was really sweet, especially Bobby. Susan really annoyed me by her attitude. I liked it because I expected Pastor Dan to be the kind one who let Bobby's blanket go in the manger, but then even he was not the kind person you might expect, he was more interested in having the scene look nice than reflect the goodness of people. It just goes to show that some people need to reminded Christmas is really about, even those who should already know. Thanks, I enjoyed reading this. Sorry to write so much I got carried away hehe :)
Interesting...true story? Not something you hear every day, I like the headline the story got in the newspaper. I would have liked to know in more detail about what Jesse did that required payback. I like that you act according to your beliefs and you think people should get what they give :) I think a little like that. Thanks, I enjoyed reading :)
Aww this was really sweet! The thought foremost in my mind now is how sad I feel for the priest. I wish nobody ever had to have regrets or question their own choices, it would make things so much easier. But I don't think those two will be questioning their choice! Thanks, I really enjoyed reading this! :)
Hi, really enjoyed reading this, is there any more? Hope so because its really good and I'm intrigued to know what goes on next. I liked Jake because he's not perfect, also a bit like me in that he prefers to laze around doing nothing or doing the things he cares about rather than school work. So I could identify with him and I like that he gets told he is impatient, badly dressed and badly mannered. Not neccessarily all true but it shows he has a lot to learn :). Thanks I really enjoyed reading this.
Wow this is really good! There's loads of things which are hinted at in this but I'm intrigued to know more about them :). I really like the characters too because they all have their secrets and I'm not quite sure yet if they're good or bad. I don't actually have any suggestions but I would like to say thank you for writing such an amazing story. Anyway, about to read a bit more! :)
I've never really been that interested in fighting of any kind, but this was really well written. There was a lot of tension going on throughout, and I felt close to the main character and I began to worry that he wouldn't win or something bad would happen to him. I also felt like I was learning a lot about MMA which helped keep me interested. Thanks :) I really enjoyed reading this!
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