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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
This is a very nice poem. I especially like the last verse. It was very touching. There are a couple instances where i think some wording could be changed. Line 4: instead of In the morning, I feel very disgraced. How about: In the morning, I feel dismissed. Line 10: instead of In a December cold breeze. How about: In December's cold breeze. Overall, good poem.


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Review by freeverse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I would like to comment on your poem. I love things that make me feel and when I finished your poem, I felt a rush of emotion spread throughout my body. I don't know anyone with a child that has autism, but I do have a cousin with a different outlook on life (just a better way to say it). The love is still there for her always. I commend you on your use of words. My favorite line : A place we cannot go, he cannot leave.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a great poem and I really like. If I could make a suggestion. There are some parts in this poem that have periods, I feel that if more commons were placed throughtout this poem it would read very smoothly. Other than that this is a great poem and I love your concept and theme.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I think that this would make a great song. It sounds to me like it would be set to a rock tune. Something more in tune with a Creed or Godsmack track. The only suggestion that I would have is tha you use the Should a child wake, live in a nightmare? through That hides from us every child as it dies? somewhere again in this song.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Excellent. I am a big fan of horror, and your poem makes my skin crawl. So that is a good response. The way that you use your words in this poem created a image for me to see everything that you conveyed. The title is what struck me the most, I was scrolling dowm the page and I just had to see what it was about. Great use of words.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Excellent poem. It is exactly as you said. The story is told throughout the poem, and the reader had no choice but to sit there and enjoy it. I am not familiar with this type of poetry, but I enjoyed it just the same. I hope that I have enough talent in myself to write a piece this captivating.
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