Interesting piece of word. Sounds like it could actually be a fly or even human being.
Great for lots and lots of laughter, something that is needed real bad today.
Very interesting piece, the excitement that is on display is well executed.
Characters are great in the role played and in the name.(Amare)
Great for adventure in reading.
Interesting poem, I can appreciate your consistent in your writing.
The way you remind the reader that your on the BEACH
Even though, plenty is going on while on the beach. You show the different events in your
narrative. Sometime rhythm is not everything.
Interesting piece; Giving up is something we rarely discuss, in society, it goes without acknowledgment.
To actually see the true words in writing, a teach our brain to be visible is a plus.
Once when we've taken on this task, then maybe we can change our outlook.
Great info on biblical truths also.
Love the example of using your hands to support and defend!
Words are everything. This is a excellent descriptive piece of Art. The way you encage with feelings through writing is awesome. Everyone can't do it, some struggle and still never achieve it, but...…
You have reached high above with these words of love from the eyes and hands of a writer.
Interesting piece of work, we witness this literally all over the world. Some area have more activities than others, put generally the words are all the same.
When I read them or see them in action, as everyone does at some point. Your feelings are yours and you own them in this piece.
Weather you've see these words in actions or read them they hold great meaning to many in a community!
Hats are off to You!
Great sentiments from the heart. Words are everything and you display that in this piece.
Time well spend, process excellently thought out.
Nothing else pleases a reader than to feel the expression given by the writer.
All signs of more, more, more!!
Keep Writing
Sheep
Good Writing; I must say that I was holding on to my seat, and grabbing hold to my popcorn.
Yeah, this is something worth going to the movies to see and even on a DVD. Folks love action pack stories, that can capture there mind.
Just one observation: In this area where you said the white lights were all he could see, should be located after the little dog turn his tail and ran. Somewhere before watching his little friend disappear. A suggestion (only).
I know I am supposed to give a review of your work, But, please allow me to just take a moment to give you a hug!after really reading this piece I felt so, overwhelm almost couldn't complete this review.
Many animal lovers may understand the shoes you wore, and then some may not. Nevertheless, there was a need for something to be done, and you stepped up to the plate. In spite of how you felt.
This story was written from your heart and all your emotions. Hats are off, to you for seeing the need to share!
You are too much!!!! Love you writing....... I personally could use this every day.
Overall your ideology is much too much, short for excellent. Your writing ability is so what of an old pro. You've been around this block several times and hopefully, you're ready to share this
profound story writing with others.
Your first paragraph was a warning of the excitement nearby. More, more!!!
Hey, don't have much to offer, but the real world and Jesus. I'm not going to say I'm sorry for all the negative things that have happened to you. But, I will defiantly say. Stand-up tall, look at you in the mirror and tell you it's time to get busy with live life to the fullest.
As, for as your writing goes, I feel your pain and hurt still presence, but can easily be swept
out. Sometimes, in life our negative experiences are to be used to help others. Start looking at who you are and what great foot prints you can make in this REAL WORLD!
Exciting piece of art, only one concern I had and that was in the beginning where you stated late after-noon. I did ponder about late afternoon, um not evening, not dust dark, but then at the end you say a full moon and including evening.
Had one problem; I couldn't figure out if this was a novel, a screenplay. If it were selected for either category would be splendored. The concept is quite unusual, but at the same time excellent with good taste.
The political side of life, needs to be shaken up ever so often. Your thoughts for this piece is outstanding with humor and seriousness is a plus!
Wow, I know, my assignment is to watch for different flaws in your writing, but this is just a little different.
This is someone's true life, you're talking about real casually. This is very painful to imagine, the difficult time, that can actually go on in someone's life.
Sure the writing is great along with the topic, but the truth to the matter is unsettling.
Very informative, and alerting to those who have no idea, about the struggle.
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