This was a very touching story. Quite compelling and emotional. It really captures the devotion that dogs have towards their owners, even when we get frusterated by them.
They can make you feel guilty for not paying attention to them!
By the end of this, I found myself wanting to go cuddle with my chocolate Lab. Congrats on a great story! :)
I really enjoyed this story, it was very descriptive and pulled me in from the beginning. You did a good job of creating Fred's character. By the end of the story, I found myself wishing I knew what the noise was. And what was it exactly?
This piece captured my attention and drew me in from the very beginning. The complexity of the characters is something to be proud of. In a way, it is tragic. But still a very good story.
I didn't find any flaws in the writing or grammar issues. It could be called perfect :D
Wow. That is all I can say to this story. It is full of excitement and action and perfectly lovely characters. I looked hard for flaws, but could find none. I did not want it to end, and by the end of the story I secretly wished for the main character to be real so that I could hug him and tell him it was all going to be okay.
Congrats on writing a great poem! I enjoyed it alot. It really captures the raw emotion felt when you are betrayed or hurt. Good job :)
There were a couple of spelling and grammar issues, but those a very minor problems. I suggest fixing them, only so the reader isn't distracted from the beauty of the piece. It's a really good poem and it'd be a shame for someone to overlook it because of some bad grammar.
All in all, it's a really lovely piece. You clearly have alot of talent, keep writing!
-Emmaleebee
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