This is such a wonderful poem. It is more than a poem. It is more of a fraction of life. I do not know how else to put this but to put it in the simplest terms. You made me cry. It has been years since my eyes were wet. But today I felt the urge to go out there and talk to my dad. In my culture, parents live with their children. We do not move out when we grow up. Living under the same roof we most of the time live in two different worlds. Most of us here are more closer to our moms than dads. It is in a way so unfair, for both moms and dads here compromise a lot for their kids. Specially in my county we have a lot of economic difficulties and because of that parents spend their entire lifetimes trying to make their child's life one step above theirs. Even my mom and dad did so. I feel like I have not been at my best to them. I was never bad. But I could have done better it seems.
Thank you very much for sharing this poem. I really really love it. It opened my eyes in a way and touched my heart. Keep writing. May peace be with you!
Before I say any thing at all about the poem itself, I must tell you that the paragraph above it is splendid. It was direct and right to the point. It opened up a nice corridor passage to the poem. I have not seen the life like you have. I have not experienced the life like you have. I am at my early twenties and I have a long way to go to get to where you are. Through the course of my day, I find it really interesting to spend some time to stop and think how my parents look at something from the higher grounds. I feel the same way about you.
The questions you ask clearly stand out for the wisdom you have gained. At first I was like, "That's a lot of questions to ask in one poem!". But as I tried it about two more times, I felt a different kind of sensation. I wanted to put myself in your boots. I know it is not something that successful. But I had to try and I felt something I have never felt like this before. I felt some sort of a confusion. I wanted to ask one more question. Have I made my presence felt in this world by changing at least one person's life to betterment? I have a long journey to take before I find out that. But to you I must say, you have done that today, right here, in this poem, unless you have done it before. Your words made a difference in my life for which I convey my gratitude to you. Keep writing old timer! (That was with total respect...) May peace be with you!
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