I really enjoyed reading this poem, and thought that the overall tone of the poem was very authentic. The line "God please, stay right here, do not disappear" being repeated in every stanza except for the last one reminded me a bit of the refrain from a song. I could sense the increasing desperation that the narrator (or author) must feel with each stanza, as he begs an unknown woman to stay with him. All in all, great job!
I thought that this was a very good Madlib, with only one minor error with quotation marks (i.e., using one quotation mark instead of two for titles of songs and reports from magazines). It was one of the longer and more detailed Madlibs that I've seen, and that made it very enjoyable. Keep up the good work!
I thought that this was a funny Madlib, and that you did a good job on it overall, apart from some very minor spelling and usage errors (i.e., the word "an" when you meant to say "and"). I liked how you explained particular words that you were looking for such as the type of relationships, feelings, and ages. It made the Madlib easier to complete, and more fun for me as a participant.
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