Well, at least you didn't say you can, 'cause the "I will" people are the cool people. You seem to be experienced, because most of the logical and been-through-a-lot people would say they don't care anymore, and that what people think of them doesn't matter. That's how most people get through life okay. I know you have the power to get through life, and by what I see here, you are the antonym of emo, and a symbolic representative of inner strength and beauty. Good job.
KW-(Keep Writing)
I can definetely see the cartoon style in here, and it wasn't over the top or under-animated. It really held my attention and had accurate humor for such a cartoon. I can assume that you must be a huge fan of "Alvin And The Chipmunks."
I found absolutely no spelling errors, and in the end, I found that it started to catch a traditional cartoon adventure. If this cartoon was on TV, I could see that where you ended was in the perfect spot, and it is a great place to make a conjunction or transition into another chapter, or episode. The detail matched that of a cartoon, very simple which played a significant role in any cartoon. Either this hit cartoon was your forte, or you are one heck on a writer. I say you should add more chapters to this awesome adventure, that is my opinion. You might even get one of your own careers in writing cartoons. I think you'd make one for a game as great as "Kingdom Hearts," or maybe a hit series show like "Naruto." But I can say you would most positively make a career as a cartoon script writer, or video game script writer, or maybe even both. I plead that you write more, and show these fellows how writing cartoons is done.
KW
My favorite line in here is "ever learning, always growing," It conjours a great philosophical point and would most defintitely inspire. Inspiration is one of the greatest things to look forward to. Many people idolize others, and/or find inspiration in music, art, tv, etc. I think those who truly inspiration can find it in this here. I have a feeling that you could give one awesome speech, and would be a great idol for children all over the world. I hope you continue to write these motivational pieces of work, and get better and better each time.
Rock On.
Well, I like your way of words through the "creator's," perspective. You have a way of words in a very simplistic way thats shows how good you can be without using a whole bunch of gigantic words.
KW
I think you nailed the genre with flying colors of creativity. I think the word enthuse gave a great spice ato this story, and really illuminated the line. I love the way you expressed your feel of blues in this heart-felt piece of literature. Was Marlene someone really close to you, as a person you knew? If so, I think she would be proud of this work. You did a breath-taking job.
KW
Oh my god, this is a dream novel for science-fiction writers. I love aliens battling mankind over the millineum and all that. It is pure science-fiction, and I detected no blunders. And I also like the classic sci-fi touch of the men and women fighting for their emporer. I most definetely believe that you should continue writing this astonishing novel, and adding entries one after another, untill your hand falls off, 'cause man your introduction is as mind-blowing as a concert. You have phenomonal potential.
KW
It sounds like an angel speaking to me trying to make a deep friendship with me. You perfectly portioned the lines and syllables and I respect your creativity. You had remarkable vocabulary and no grammatical errors nor spelling. It also sounds like your trying to break through someone's emotional and mental barrier, and create a trust bond with them. If I were this person, I would be more than happy to take you up on your offer if you asked this question. Unless I didn't have any pain nor shame, then I'd be wondering. I also thought it was very creative how you increased the size of the font in order to make it look more attractive. Procceed down the path of an official writer of which you have forged with your mind-blowing intelligence and creativity.
KW
It is perfect and I love that song by Iron Maiden. I hope you continue to make madlibs, 'cause this is what I came up with:
"Woe to you, Oh Earth and Sea, for the Devil sends the
beast with demons, because he knows the time is short...
Let him who hath understanding reckon the number of the
beast, for it is a human number; its number is 911."
I left alone; my mind was sexy
I needed time to think, to get the americas from my mind
What did I see? Can I believe that what I saw
that night was real and not just beautiful?
Just what I dragged in my old dreams, were they
reflections of my warped mind staring back at me?
'Cos in my dream, it's always there
The evil campfire that stops my mind
and brings me to despair
The night was black, was no use holding back
'Cos I just had to see, was someone happening me?
In the mist dark figures kiss and twist
Was this all for real or some kind of hell?
911 the number of the beast
Hell and fire was spawned to be released
Torches blazed and sacred nobodys were praised
As they start to cry, JC Pennys held to the sky
In the night, the fires burning bright
The ritual has begun; Bret Michaels's work is done
911 the number of the beast
Sacrifice is going on tonight
This can't go on; I must inform the lawn mower
Can this still be real, or just some dignified dream?
But I feel drawn towards the exercising Ghosts
They seem to love... can't avoid their chest hairs
911 the number of the beast
911 the one for you and me
I'm coming back; I will kill
I will understand your hand gun and I'll make you realize
I have the goblin eater, I have the force
I have the power to make my Goro's lair take its course
It demonstrates a level-headed amount of gratitude to the doctor, not over-exxagerating it, nor drifting negative, it was perfect. I also like the transition from doctor to officer of the star ship enterprise. You did a stunning job in rhyme, with every other line. If you do the same with other works, they may be just as fine.
I love the idea of "Spring forwarding an E-mail to Sol." You put together a great astronomical, as well as seasonal philsophy. This seems more like poetry. Did you ask people to shout out random words so that you can put them into a little story, 'cause that's sometimes how I come up with stories.
KW
I believe you have a true piece of poetry here. My most favorite line is "The face created was my own," it really explained a lot. I beleive this talks about faulty criminal pin-pointing.
KW
I like you little holiday story, although there were various grammar errors that need to be checked. I also believe you should indent parts of the story to form paragraphs. You made a very warm story, even though it was winter, which is a good thing.
KW
Your writing is perfect.
Wow, I don't see how your so good.
You must be an author in the real world.
You must be rich on this site, and I'm sure this literature would make you even richer in the real world.
I hope for no bounds to your fantastic work.
KW
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