Very simplified but alot of meaning, well thought of, nice metaphor and very effective.Beauty really has no words like arcums razor the simple truth is usualy the best truth : ) "Well done", does not say enough. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece.
I really enjoyed the look into New England history. It reads as a self guiding tour through that time line.You left enough room with in the story itself, to allow formore if you ever choose to add to it. You say that you first wrote this back in High School....may I ask what caused you to hold on to it for so long? A wonderful look at histor. Thanks for sharing!
A hearts feeling put into words. Very descriptively written poem allowing the reader to see what the heart is feeling as it looks at the love it holds so dear.I did wonder if perhaps one more stanza would befitting? Just to add to the descriptive style of the poem to show the awaking, before the kiss?
A tale well written! You take a combination of fantasy,folklore, and inspiration to create a wonderfully written story of determination and dreams. I must ask how did you come up with the idea of using stones for the characters? It really does parallel our own existence. Thank you for sharing.
Very nice!! Wonderfully written.Love the idea of middle earth tavel.Your thoughts are very well desiphered and delivered. Keeps your mind working and begging for more. Dragon's and magic seem to really to grab a wide age range, and with this story plot it, will do great!
Iam a little confused as to the point of the story. Is it a story, or is it a diary. The first parts starts off as a story setting then it jumps to a entry type...like a journal. Maybe start by using the first apart as an introduction, then start the actual journal. It has a lot of good thoughts just needs to be more focused, and pulled together. Keep up the good work you are on the right track.
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