*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/dewaholic/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/19
Review Requests: OFF
1,504 Public Reviews Given
1,842 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I look to be entertained, informed, and connected in some way. It may be wrong but if the first few lines or paragraphs don't hook me in some way, I will leave without even reading the rest. Also, I will notify you if I run into errors.
I'm good at...
I do not mean to toot my own horn but I am awesome at limericks. I've helped so many people with limericks. I've even thought about opening up a class here on limericks.
Favorite Genres
In no particular order: humor, horror, biography. I'll read any genre but those are my main favorites!
Least Favorite Genres
I'm not sure. Maybe legal or finance but if done in the right voice, even that can be good.
Favorite Item Types
Poetry, short stories, bios, essays,fiction, and nonfiction
Least Favorite Item Types
pros, books
I will not review...
Something that is LONG like 100 kbs or something. I will only review long pieces if someone requests it of me but nothing that's 100 kb. Let's not get crazy or anything.
Public Reviews
Previous ... 15 16 17 18 -19- 20 21 22 ... Next
451
451
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

Hello BlueSkye!

I have read "Review of Living Dead Girl"  and I offer you these suggestions.

First impression: I was curious what the song meant. Just because I like it, doesn't mean I knew what it meant. I don't even know what half the songs I like mean. (even if I know all the words)


What I liked most: That I could actually hear the song as I read the lyrics. And that it was very informative, going line by line of the song. Now I know what that song means. (How about thunderkiss 65?)



Write on!

Jenny
452
452
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


Hello Gabrielle! I have read "I Pledge No Allegiance"  and I give these suggestions.



What I liked most:I liked how this was written with a twist on the line from the pledge of allegiance.


Suggestion: Don't change a thing.


Write on,

Jenny
453
453
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


Hello Erk!
I have read "I Have Appendicitis"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: A father talking to his son about his illness and now the son has to be the man of the house. I'm glad to see it's fiction though.


What I liked most: I liked how it was writen. As a father talking to his son.


Suggestion:I think that since this is basically a conversation that you should have quote marks in the beginning and end. The first letter should be capitalized anyway, the doctors say that I have at most two weeks to live. well, let's just say they're not exactly 100%. I think that would look better if you spelled it out, saying a hundred percent. This goes for the other numbers in the story.

All in all, good story. With a little polishing, it will be even better.


Write on,

Jenny
454
454
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

Hello Oldwarrior! I have read "I CAN SEE YOU NAKED!"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: The title is what made me read this in the first place. That was the very first impression.


What I liked most: The whole story I could relate to. Well about public speaking. Great job. I was sympathizing and relating. I couldn't pictire people naked though, because I'd end up laughing.


Suggestion: Don't change a thing. And write more!


Write on,

Jenny
455
455
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **




Hello Apriori!
I read {item:1475386 } and wanted to offer you this review:



Emotional Impact: This was a good attempt at a limerick, which any limerick I think is funny in its own way.



Effectiveness of Form:



Punctuation and Grammar:The syllables were just a tiny bit off. You had 8, 8, 5, 6, 9. So you had the form of aabcd. A limerick is supposed to be aabba.

*Star*Closing comments: With a little bit of work, this can be a perfect limerick.

Write on,

Jenny
456
456
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jyo,

I saw teeth and I just knew it was from Acme's halloween contest. Great poem. It was funny, flowed smoothly, and had no errors.

Great work.

Write on,

Jenny
457
457
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Web witc hing,

This poem was absolutlely great. I didn't see any errors and the subject matter was fantastic!

Write on,

Jenny
458
458
Review of Rage Within  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

Hello Sariah! I have read "Rage Within"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: From the first few sentences it grabbed onto my attention and held it throughout. The more I read on, the more I couldn't believe things like these can actually happen to a person. I know that it does happen, because my best friend has gone through similar things.


What I liked most: It was written very well and I liked that you were able to share something like this.


Suggestion: I don't recall any errors.

Write on,



Jenny
459
459
Review of Blind Date  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Lee,

*Laugh* That was great. It had me laughing out loud.

I thought the story was smooth and flawless. Great stuff!

Write on,

Jenny
460
460
Review of Beware  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Emma,

Thank you for your entry. This story only had fourteen titles, when it called for at least 15.

I do hope that I will see another entry from you in the future.

Write on,

Jenny
461
461
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **



Hello Kay!

I have read "Myrna, Dark and Light"  and I offer you these comments.


First impression: This was a piece about your mother. It started off with talking about the good things, then onto the not so good things about your mother.

What I liked best: I personally like any piece that lets me peak into the writer's life.


Suggestions: There's problems with this sentence: That is not what she got. Instead of roses and romance, she got someone who was never taken care of himself; therefore he never understood that need in someone else. Try to reword it maybe.
I also think that you should tell a little more about your mother. Like, why do you think that your mother ended up like that? Just a suggestion of course.

Write on,

Jenny
462
462
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

Hello Nicki!

I have read "Invalid Item"  and I offer you these suggestions.

First impression: A family sitting down to dinner with a mishap during.


What I liked most: That it was funny, although it shouldn't have been. I pictured everyoine at the table and I was laughing at you. I shouldn't have, but I just couldn't help myself. I had a sigh of relief when your son was okay and nothing like you thought would happen, happened.


Overall impression: I thought it was a funny family mishap and your daughter's last comment sort of lightened the whole situation.


Write on!

Jenny
463
463
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


Hello Richard!
I read {item:1485465 }and I offer you you these comments.


First Impression: This story was quite a different vampire story. Very unique vampire character.

What I liked: I liked that the vampire was kind of nerdy. I have never seen a kind of nerdy vampire and that was a nerdy vampire. It would have just been even better, if he tripped or something since vampires are always graceful, usually.






Suggestions: This story has a ton of grammar errors. Wrongful comma placements all throught. (Don't fret. I found out that it's a very common mistake) There's some things that needed to be questions, but had no question marks. I think that you should go back and try to correct these.

*Star*

Write on,

Jenny
464
464
Review of Four-Word March  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Coal,

I love things like these. Fun and a bit challenging to make sense. My favorite part is the title. Very creative!

Write on,

Jenny
465
465
Review of Greasy  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


HelloBill!
I read "Greasy" and I offer you you these comments.


First Impression: The great imagery made me want to read more. I could picture everything.


What I liked: Personally, I liked that it was in first person. I don't get to see many first person pov. The story flowed smoothly and was a great read.





Suggestions: I have none.

*Star*

Write on,

Jenny
466
466
Review of Matriphobia  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


Hello Hyperiongate!
I read "Matriphobia" and I offer you you these comments.


First Impression: That the main character was doing something that he feared. I had no idea what that was until the ending.


What I liked: Events were quickly flashing in front of his eyes, as he remembered about days gone by. It semed as if he couldn't keep his mind on what was currently happening, which made him believable. I thought the ending tied nicely into the story.





Suggestions: I think maybe that more of a current setting can be mentioned. Along with the flashbacks, give a sense of "here and now". That is only my suggestion though.

*Star*

Write on,

Jenny
467
467
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello SuperDiscoFunk,

This was terrific. It had great imagery. I picturedd everything well.

Write on,

Jenny

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
468
468
Review of ABCs for Bands  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.5)
Mel,

Hey this was cool. A bit crazy but cool. Remember to take a stab at the story telling. You can get away with a lot. Contest ends next Thurs. Don't lose your mind trying to create, just have fun.

Write on,

Jen
469
469
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hello N8,

These are only my opinions and suggestions. I don't think there was a great deal here, for something about you. For something about yourself, I would think that there would be more to this. This is filled with grammar errors. No punctuation and upper lowercase thrown about.

Of course you don't have to change a single thing if you don't want. This was just my take on it.

Write on,

Jenny
470
470
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Ruby,

This was very good. I didn't run into any errors and the story seemed to go smoothly.

I have never read anything gay before. I love vampire stories and this was a completely new version for me. Kind of refreshing.

Write on,

Jenny
471
471
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.0)
Brittany,

What an interesting poem. I'm not exactly sure you captured the girls true feelings. UNless of course you are this girl and this is how you felt. I just felt that for a twenty first birthday, a one night stand may not be as big of a deal as this poem implies.

Now since she had her head laying on the bar afterwards, I guess it's safe to assume it happened at the bar? When a one night stand happens, the person doesn't know that it's a one night stand until later. Also, happening in the bar, makes it seem more like rape. These are only my opinions though.

Write on,


Jenny
472
472
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Kay,

I absolutely loved this. I loved how this long list had a bunch of humor. Humourus lists are always awesome. There's a lot of things about you, that I share the same traits. Like I'm sarcastic, stubborn and a night owl. Just to name a few.

Write on,

Jenny
473
473
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Artie,

I just love to read about people. I feel like I really know who you are now. I liked how you made it colorful, when it was called for.

Write on,

Jenny
474
474
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Harry,

This was a teriffic poem. It flowed nicely and had a good rhythm. The subject was also good and I couldn't agree more. I think that this war is completely senseless. I just can't wait until his term is over with. (which is soon)

Write on,

Jenny

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
475
475
Review of Jealousy  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Karyn,

This was great. The story was excellent and the band names fit in the story very nicely. I didn't run into any errors either. I hope you will enter again and please spread the word. *Smile*

Write on,

Jenny
533 Reviews · *Magnify*
Page of 22 · 25 per page   < >
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/dewaholic/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/19