This felt striking in a way. How it kept switching focus captured the feel of this kind of mental illness perfectly, and a part of me was driven to a sort of...emotional reaction with it. Good on you, author, not a lot of people have managed to do that, given how much online stories I read so frequently.
Okay, this one got a chuckle out of me. A fairly decent short story, and a sweet one at that. Good on you, you seem to have a plethora of short stories under your belt and they're all decently written. Unfortunately I think writing them so quickly might sacrifice quality a little bit. If that's not a bother to you then that's fine, but I wonder what your potential could really climb to if you took a while longer and focus on some kind of development or try to use this funny twist and use it for something striking, like a 200 word horror story or even just two sentences. I believe you have that potential.
This was a sadly sweet story, with a solid use of symbolism even if slightly obvious with the term "raven-haired". I believe that's fine, however, as perhaps the symbolism would have been lost otherwise.
I felt the emotions of this woman, and these three women almost appear spiritual in a way, and seem to be a symbol of comfort despite being said to be Greek, where ravens are said to be bad luck. If this was purposeful then good on you, I really felt that comfort.
The lack of an ending where she leaves or begins to recover makes me yearn to know what happened to her. I hope I can find something in your portfolio that helps me figure this out.
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