This is a really good poem that I had to read several times to get the feel (which I find to be a mark of great work). Love the atmosphere and the gothic nature of the piece. Well done.
I'm not to sure about the refrainment from any punctuation but I'm sure there is a reason behind this. All in all though really enjoyable.
Hi Law, this is a very strong piece with a brilliant start. I can tell that it's well-polished and written very neatly with some fantastic visuals. It's one of those pieces that feels publishable, if you get my meaning. If the story is there then it has a real chance. One negative and it's only small, the paragraph lengths seem maybe a bit chunky. Perhaps chopping them into smaller chunks may help the flow.
Overall though great start and it’s made me want to read more!
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