This was a great piece of work. You left me wanting to know more about the process of transporting a plan all throughout your piece and I like how you ended it with the fact that the crew hadn't been out of the US. It was a perfect ending. I now want to read more of your work. Keep up the great work and write on. I know it's not much but I have included 200 gift points in my review.
This is a great point of view story. I liked how it was told from the dog's perspective. I do have to say that there are quite a few spelling and grammatical errors that need to be corrected. I would recommend copying this into a word doc. For example, in the third line of the second paragraph, you wrote to instead of too. Overall, though, it is a great short story. Keep up the great work.
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