Your story emphasizes our need to help and be helped. This is how we're made to live, as the Bible at Eccl. 4:11 and Acts 20:35 says. Unfortunately, many do not these days. Hopefully, your story will influence a few.
There's a saying that kindness doesn't cost much, so why isn't there more of it? Yet sometimes kindness costs dearly, as your article points out. Fine writing as I've seen in all your pieces I've read.
The world often says, "If at first you don't succeed, try, try again." Yet, "... try something else." is often the better solution, as your story demonstrates. Thanks for sharing it. As for reviewing the quality of the writing itself, it seems fine to me.
This is just as you said, a touching story with a wise thought. You've accomplished what you've set out to do. I enjoyed it thoroughly, and hopefully, have learned something from it.
Your story's off to a great start. Ace and Luna happily begin their adventure together. I look forward to reading your subsequent chapters to see how their personalities develop. One thing I found a bit strange is that Ace "dashed into the tent" to get clothes for Luna -- but later when time to retire, they set up the tent. Does the tent somehow need additional setting up for sleeping?
Yet your writing is quite picturesque. I can imagine the scenes as if they were illustrated. Great work.
Excellent, well-researched article helped me appreciate Womens' contribution to our lives. Your writing captured well how these women labored with skill and determination against the headwinds of discrimination. Reading your article makes me feel good.
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