This is super descriptive! I love that! You can really visualize the couch and the setting. And yes, moving a couch sucks! I am also glad I am not the only one with a fireplace that never gets used!
This was really fun to read and was just well written! I applaud your style!
What doesn't kill you makes you stronger. So very true! Everyone has struggles in their life at some point, though some others struggle a lot more than others. I am glad you made it to the top. Not every one does. My wife and I have struggled for years as she went to school. She could have quit and got some meaningless job to help out more, but we wanted her to have a career. Now she does and should get her first paycheck tomorrow. It will be bigger than her working a few months at a minimum wage job. The climb was hard. Now our life will get easier! It didnt kill us, so we are stronger!
I am going to give this a shot! I have no idea what I will write about, but I love the idea of writing something new every month! This post perfectly explains the rules and Requirements of the contest. It is very clearly stated so that people will not have any issues understanding. It’s also not overtly complicated. And really great prize amounts! Looking forward to participating!
Seven years with out a vacation! That does not sound like fun! I love how you have each line a different color, and if I am not mistaken, they are the colors of the four seasons? This was a simple and effective way to show "Summers of Dissatisfaction" I hope you get to go on vacation soon!
Normally, I do not do much with poetry, but this really spoke to me. It says, in a way, that everything has purpose. No matter what it does or feels like in the moment, their is a reason for it in the long run. Learn from your past, and accept that things happen. Another thing i do not normally do, is give a 5 star rating. But I am going to for this! Very well done!
This is a wonderful idea! I have not had a lot of experience with Augmented reality stuff, but this would be so useful for so many people! Plus, who does not want to see their home on an alien planet with two moons and such! I feel like the person who this is about, is going to be making a fair bit of money of this soon! Good for him! This kind of thing would make life easy. But maybe to easy...?!
I am not the best when it comes to grammar and spelling, but I found no mistakes!
This was kind of confusing to read, but in a good way! Life would be utter chaos if time worked liked this! Silly Walter! I feel like this would make an excellent short film or something! I hope that Walter fixes time soon, or has fixed time? Will fix time? Who has the time to figure out time like this!!! Super fun read though!
I am not the best when it comes to grammar or spelling but I saw no mistakes!
Short, Sweet, and full of meaning! A great, yet simple way, to honor those who have died fighting for the freedoms most people don't realize they even have.
One of my life regrets is not joining the armed forces. (My dad was air force, and an asshole, so it turned me off the idea) but I have deep respect for those who have and do serve!
I always remember snow on Christmas and how much it made that day better. (Though ipads were not around when I was a kid!). I like how the older child is letting his younger sibling still believe in Santa. I had 3 older brothers (two of them step brothers) and they ruined that magic for me when I was very young. It also would have been nice to play in the snow while dad shovels, but us kids did all the shoveling since I was about six!
I enjoyed reading this quite a bit. Made me think of my own child hood
I am not the best at grammar and stuff but I saw no mistakes
This sounds so very interesting! Soon I will go and read the first parts to it and would love to read more on what happens after! A creature people can’t see sounds terrible, but it might be worse to be able to see it!
I am also not the best with grammar and stuff, but I found no mistakes.
So it’s interesting to read and review something written by The Story Mistress, but I shall!
This looks to be a super helpful item for the newcomers to WDC. I even learned about auto reward reviews! Did not know you can search those directly.
I am also not the best with grammar and stuff, but I found no mistakes.
Of course reading this, one would assume that the date was between Thoam and Robberti. It was an interest twist to find out t they had other dates.
This was fun and easy to read. Well written. Interesting name choices too. Seems like uncommon spellings of common names Tom=Thoam. Roberta=Robertti. I like it. Maybe it’s common to you but it’s new to me!
I am also not the best with grammar and stuff, but I found no mistakes.
Poor Marla! That must have been all sorts of confusing! Also, what kind of job does Harry have if he can jus nonchalantly call his boss and say that his CLONE is at his house!
This was super fun to read and I would love to know more of the story!
I am also not the best with grammar and stuff, but I found no mistakes.
This was an interesting piece to read! I like the descriptions you used and how well it flowed. My only thought is that you kind of spoil the fact that the kids find the presents , before actually describing the search. I think it would be more fun to learn if they find them, as they are finding them.
I am also not the best with grammar and stuff, but I found no mistakes.
This is a very well written guide between the two different styles. It would be super helpful to those who need clarification. I love the examples given as well. Should make it clear to anyone how each style is supposed to go.
Very well written and very informative. I am not the best when it comes to grammar and stuff but I saw no mostakes
This is fun! I love the idea of the character being able to understand and communicate with the narrator! Kind of makes me wonder what the narrator of my life has to say about me!
This a very unique idea that i have not seen done before. Sure, I have seen the movie “Stranger than Fiction” where the guy can hear his narrator, but he couldn’t talk to her as she narrated! Such a clever idea! I would love to see more of these two and their interactions!
I do not give out 5 stars very often, as I think only the best deserve the best, but your cleverness deserves all five stars!
So to start, I am not that interested in poetry and do not count myself a good judge of its worth. That being said, I really enjoyed reading this. I felt like it had a good flow to it and read very well. I do not know how poems are supposed to be broken into line by line or whatever, but I like how short the verses are. They make for a quick and satisfying read.
I agree with most of this! I would say that the last part should be correct, but I know a lot of parents who are not there for their children, it that is another tale for another time.
Sometimes you need to evaluate the relationships you have and determine if they are worth keeping in your life.
I am not the best at grammar and stuff, but I think you are missing a period in the beginning between “discomfort” and “people”
This was well written. I love the amount of detail used to describe the places. It also sounds like a trip I would like to take someday. I love history and learning about. I do not do well with grammar and stuff, but as far as I can tell, there are no mistakes or misspelled words
Very well written. Love is an elusive creature many hunt their whole lives and never find. I enjoyed reading this and imagined soft harp music in my head as I did. I am not the best when it comes to grammar and such, but I found no mistakes. I hope you found that love though!
I love snow! My wife, not so much. I really like the very well used descriptive words used in this. It really helps put a real picture in ones head while reading this. It makes me want to go build a snowman! I am not the best when it comes to grammar, but I found nothing wrong.
This is just FANTASTIC! I loved it! The very first line had me laughing right away! You have a comedic gift, my friend. I have a very odd sense of humor , and this fits the bill! Although, i must side with the primary colors. Screw the other crayons! Primary colors for life!
This will make a wonderful world to develop a bunch of stories! Very in depth, yet open enough to create changes. I would love to read more on the first natural magic user. His story would be very interesting. Looking forward to the rest of this one too.
This was fun to read. I want to go on vacation with this lady! Her adventures sound surreal! But why did she carry so much odd food with her? Banana for the moose, salmon for the bear. Weird lady. And George just following her around like some private paparazzi, taking pictures of her strange near death experiences. So much fun to read!
I have heard this argument quite a bit in the past. I agree. I am an American from the USA. There are Americans from Canada, Brazil, Portugal, and many others. It's just another way that the United States of America tries to prove it's superiority in the world. I'm just going to move to Canada.
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/breadbowl
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.11 seconds at 3:00am on Nov 05, 2024 via server WEBX2.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
My review has been submitted for consideration in "