This poem gave really strong visuals and flowed nicely. A lot of times it seems like free verse is just a bunch of words thrown together and lack structure. But, this does flow and has rhythm through the visuals. Keep up the great work.
On your poetry folder you state that you don't write a lot of poems, but you should. I don't read much nor enjoy most people's work (can't relate to them). Although, poetry doesn't need to rhyme (really should), it needs to flow. A poem is a like a puzzle, not this 'new age' pile of words that most write. There needs to be thought put into it. The time put in structuring a poem is time contemplating one's thoughts (learning from yourself is the main reward from a poem), and it shows in the final piece of any work.
This is a really good poem that has depth and can be viewed though multiple perspectives. This is a poem that most can relate to in one way or another. Keep up the good work.
I’m not a very good reader or at comprehending that of what I’ve read. But, many lines of this poem caused goosebumps. As if I was looking in a mirror at my own reflection. Good work.
Our life's consist of test that seperate one individual from the rest. The girl in this story is prime example of what normal is. Jack is part of her and pushing him away would be giving up on herself. It is nice to find another person or in this case character that understands the importance of life. It isn't what others might think of us for they are only our life's background. I am very happy with the way she was presented. As far as "tips for improvement", writing is art. Their should be no standard for improment, because with someone's hep it is no longer yours. I am a decent "story teller", but awful with spelling, grammer, sentence structure, ect. To many lose the art by searching for mistakes. Saddly their search is a waste of time for there are no mistakes in art, just different aspecs. Good Job BMF
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