I enjoyed reading your poem. It is very thought provoking.
Thank you for sharing it. We see so much evil in this world,
that there are times it over whelms people. But, they should
remember there is the creator, that is never defeated.
Continue with your style of writing. I feel it has a free flow,
I would not say it is traditional. It has a tradition of its' own.
Thank you again.
Miz Kitty
Greetings, I have enjoyed reading your writing. I was sent two trees, they were suppose to be apple trees, but they turned out to be poplars. They are now almost three times as high as my one story house. I can not put my arms around one tree, they are huge. Did you ever think what you wrote would be the truth in another's life?
I shall sincerely give a good suggestion, but, remember it is up to you to accept some if helpful, or none if you find your satisfied as it is.
I have enjoyed your work.{/}
A meaningful writing. Suggestions{/}
check out for the use of commas.
This is what I enjoyed the most{/}
There is a strength that grows in us to make us stronger, also I like the comparison.
I encourage you to "keep writing", even if one writes at random, making no sence, you never know when the words will leap off the page for something new.
Thank you for your writing, well done.
Sincerely, Miz Kitty
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Greetings, I have enjoyed reading your writing. Happy Birthday, Kiya!
I shall sincerely give a good suggestion, but, remember it is up to you to accept some if helpful, or none if you find your satisfied as it is.
I have no suggestions, smiling, very nice tribute for a friend.
Written in stanza form, but, not in syllable form. Not in rhyming form.
I have enjoyed your work.{/}
A lovely poem, would say free lance, Suggestions{/}
This is what I enjoyed the most{/}
I enjoyed you writing about a friend, caring and loving. I encourage you to "keep writing"
Greetings, I have enjoyed reading your writing. SHOP WITH CARE
I shall sincerely give a good suggestion, but, remember it is up to you to accept some if helpful, or none if you find your satisfied as it is. I like it as is. And no, I have had my own encounter
with an Angel, so I do not doubt it if you have had one, also.
This is so beautifully enchanting. I have looked out my window at night and seen the clouds pass over the moon, leaving a light that would shine behind the cloud, some shining through places. It is beautiful when the moon has a gold ring around it. We have been given so much beauty and it is lovely to read of
it. Thank you for sharing your poem.
Miz Kitty
Very touching, deep emotions, sad
Thank you for sharing your poem.
Well done.
Miz Kitty
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Lovely, emotional, tender to the mind.
Thank you Michelle for sharing your poem.
I find nothing to change, only to wish
life were filled with more beautiful gardens
to rest in after a weary day.
Miz Kitty
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Very meaningful, emotional, beautifully written.
I am understanding the aacbbcddc now then when I
first saw it. Smiling.
Getting into more poetry forms, so very interesting.
Smiling, here, mischance took me to France, and to
King Henry VI, part 1 >Act IV. Never can tell where you will end up.
Thank you for sharing your poem, great writing.
Miz Kitty
A very interesting article. I have run into your tule fog, I am not sure ours here in Maine, has a name. It formed like a curtain, no idea how far up in the air it went. The other time, we had to use a flash ligh to inch our way out of the fog. It was scary. This was done, gradually driving less then 5 mph. It was sort of like old people walking their cars, not driving.
I enjoyed your article. Thank you for sharing with us.
Miz Kitty
A great story line. I enjoyed it, I would of had goose bumps sitting around the campfire.
There are a couple of items you seem to be having trouble with, as follows:
each following sentences are partly written:
(He'd learned a long time ago not to ask questions(,)but he did wonder(,)....
...no problem seeing in the dark(,)but...
...Sam was not a demon(,)but despite...
These two areas of a comma before, (but)also (and).
I find myself studying the one about (and). Take a study for yourself if you feel weak in using these, and the commas.
Thank you both for your campfire, it was scary, smiling, but neat.
Miz Kitty
A lovely poem oldwarrior, well done, out side of two small things, like a comma and a semi-colon. It is very deep and meaningful.
I think if I counted right it is in the 10th stanza, (but her love for me(,)and sacred vows...)
13th stanza, ( and the fires of hell were fed(;)
these are two independent clause. They could stand on their own.
But, it sounds better this way for the flow.
Thank you for sharing this lovely poem. I hope you will keep working out your poems, your a natural, smiling.
Miz Kitty
I enjoy it so when someone is not afraid to speak up on all issues. We all are special and equal as you have written, everyone no matter how they started out, can improve what they have, so many great people have started with next to nothing. Abraham Lincoln, was indeed poor, but became our President. Fine writing, thank you for sharing your writing with us, Katasha.
Miz Kitty
Keep writing you have a fine way with words.
Smiling
Only one word ( to be in the desert, spelled with one s)
Smiling, but to sit down and have an ice cream as a dessert, had two s's.
I enjoyed reading The Child, makes you feel the seasons coming and going, The coming together of two people, loving. The warmth that is given, your writing flows from one easily into the next happening in the life on earth. Thank you for sharing this writing.
Miz Kitty
This is beautiful, sad, striving, all we do in our life, thinking the pasture is green more rich on the other side. Only to find what we have at home, is worth more
then all the gold. Your poem brought me to tears, so very moving. Thank you
sincerely for sharing this poem.
Miz Kitty
Well done, very finely filled with a lot whole lot of action, enjoyed reading,
Must of been one of those portals you became a poet, smiling. Was tricky at the end of a couple of sentences, but it was the very end of the word that made it work with the second sentence. Enjoyed reading, some rhyming is straight forward, others can be rather sneaky, but works, smiling.
Thank you
Miz Kitty
I enjoyed reading this, it brought a smile to me. It is exciting to try out these different forms of poetry. One of my most loved poets is Rumi.
Thank you for sharing this place with us all, and for sharing your writing, which
I have found interesting to say the least.
Smiling with you, keep on going.
Miz Kitty
This was very moving, thank you stick for sharing this with us. Some poetry is
not meant to rhyme. It is poetry from the heart. You can not always walk in a
straight line, even if your life depended on it. So with poetry, the season, the
words, the imagination, the spark. Some of the greatest poets, have poems
that do not rhyme, like Basho.
Thank you again for a fine poem in my opinion.
Keep working at it.
Miz Kitty
I have always thought the sunset was beautiful, the colors of pastel or sometimes, here it would be the red, red, as it went down behind the mountains. When looking inside of ourselves we think over what we have done the sin we have committed, it to sets with the sun. A new day begins.
And out of the ashes of dead and broken bones and wings, rises another
day per-chance to do better. Your thoughts here, invoke the mind to think,
deeper in ourselves. Thank you for sharing this.
Miz Kitty
When I first came on line, the group of people I met were neat. We would start a poem as you are here and each add to it. It would get pretty funny at times.
Smiling, have enjoyed this, thank you Puja for thinking of doing this.
Miz Kitty
This is a warm loving corner for us to come and show how we feel about others, just knowing so little a time, but how we grow close in our friendship with each other, I gave a 5 but if it were higher it would be a 10+, smiling. Thank you
I was moved by what you have written, the description of each place this shadow stopped at. The bent of different characters you have in you story, from one place to the next, The end was very moving. The crunch he made on the gravel, before that I wondered if it was
death walking to his destination. If it were a man, but reading the last part of the elder lady, death sometimes gives us no chance to
be afraid.
Thank you for sharing this story.
Miz Kitty
I like your poem, it is not tradition rhyme, but it is interesting to read.
I have been put in that position, when younger, oh you can do it, you'll
be fine. All the time your mind is whirling around. Then, quietly you sit
down and it just flows out of your fingers into the pen and onto the page,
you have written again.
I enjoyed you style.
Thank you for sharing your writing, smiling here.
Miz Kitty
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I thoroughly enjoyed your poem.
I like the way your discriptions made you feel like
you could reach out and touch what you were discribing.
Thank you for sharing this poem. It is like reflections of
your mind, which I am guilty of saying often, smiling when
writing poetry.
Miz Kitty
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