This was very riveting! I am hoping this is just a small part of a much bigger story. I found it descriptive and a great pace with just the right amount of suspense. Just one very minor suggestion (and this may just be me as I am not sure if it is grammatically correct): when they do catch her it says "The ground was the only thing she could still feel being drug across the pavement, back to them." It seems the ground is being drug not the woman. It is just does not feel right to me. I understand your meaning but I am not comfortable with the flow.
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