I have to say from the start that this story or piece of it is truly dark, and you embrace the feelings of the darkness and moments of light well. As a writer you are unafraid to say, or allow the character to say what she needed. The story is well written with few mistakes from what I can see and the emotions of the main character about her family is clear. To me you also succeed in making your main character deeper than one might first have thought by showing she is a conflicted person. She hates her family and believes they shouldn't live, and but she still states that she would not let them be killed if she could help it. She still loves them because they are her family.
This thesis is well written both in its structure and clearness of supplying information to the reader. As this is stated to be a thesis and not a complete work, I assuming from the given description, it is written as if the statements made are true and absolute. This is only my opinion, but if the thesis question is if the order of birth is relative then you might want to add researched support to the statements given. I say this because the statements of how the order of birth affect how a child is treated and in tern acts is just to general. In my person experience some of these things do not apply to my family and I think other would agree.
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