I actually believe you are amazing? How do you do this? There is no way I could write like this. You get absolutely everything into a nutshell and then deliver!
Fantastic, you are such a good writer, in my opinion and it is a pleasure to have found you on here!
This is an excellent piece of writing and you are so correct in what you say.
People hiding behind the scenes should not be able to rate in my opinion. If one cannot be open and upfront then they should keep their misguided opinions to themselves.
The only reason this is done, in my humble opinion, is because they are coming from fear and in their normal everyday life have no power of their own. And so, they try and make mincemeat of the power you, the poet or writer has!
Being powerful and mighty and hiding behind a big 'incognito'bush at the same time is childish, cowardly, and unworthy of a human being at this moment of now.!
Simply ignore this and let it go! Know the Truth of your Being and keep writing. Be the best you can at every moment of now and believe in yourself. Afterall, your communication with writing comes from Divine Source, this is where you get your intuition from and sobeit....it is the best place TO get it from.
So just let go and let God and you will be fine my friend. I am now going to visit your port and read for myself and I shall be upfront and honest all the time to the extent of my own personal opinions!
Wow! a lot of deep thinking has gone into this poem. Reminds me of my youth and how I used to think in those days and then write it down in what I called 'a poem' ?
This is beautiful I must say and precise but I also understand your feelings at that particular moment of now. I have had many of them and it is all part of life's rich pathway that we each need to walk in order to grow.
I can imagine you are quite young and then again, I could be wrong. I shall take a peek at your Portfolio because I sense some real talent here and would wish to read some more.
Love and Light to you and yours and of course, A wondrous Christmas and a very 'writable New Year!'
This is a deep poem that requires readers to truly think about the meaning at the back of these words!
Of course, only you know your 'thinking' mode. However, I feel you are almost 'testing the waters' and are not quite sure exactly. That is fine for we change our minds so many times on our walk along the pathway that is named 'life'.
Just feel free to express yourself at all times and to be true to yourself at all times. That way, you will grow, flourish and walk the talk all the time.
I enjoyed our poem but I do not know you as a person well enough to truly judge. For me it was satisfying and that is, in my opinion, what is required in a poem.
So, keep on writing, like we all do, all trying to improve and understand more.
I found a lot of wonder in this poem, it started so well but then I felt there was not much true tempo and it seemed a little unbalanced.
I am by no means an expert in writing poetry but I do have quite a good ear (being musical) when it comes to listening. I listened to myself reading this out loud and kidded myself I could improve upon this for you!(hope you are not offended?)
I know I have a cheek but it may help you - I myself have been helped a lot by people on this site so just see what you think? -----
In a chaotic moment
beauty is destroyed.
From descruction comes creation.
The beauty is restored.
From Chaos comes a vision
made luminous by itself.
The seeds of creation
form the ashes of yourself!
There is chaos before peace
as the wings of a dove declare.
Such joy in the birds release
as it sours into the air.
Through chaos we find
how we are meant to be.
Infiltrating our mind
it often sets us free.
So if it should destroy me
as my soul leaves one time more.
My life will be a memory
that could leave an open door?
See what you think and work on it some more. Good luck with this. When I have time in the next few days I will visit your Port as well.
Sorry if I have annoyed you.
Love and Light to you.
This is the piece that I actually read first. It is a magnificent portrayal of your mind. Thinking this way will lead you forward on exactly the correct pathways for you as you come to different crossroads in your life. You have many years before you to make your mark and I an utterly convinced that you will.
Keep your dreams close to you and do not allow anyone to get in your way. Always remember that you are the most important person in the world. This is true because you are a very important and individual expression of Divine Source, God, Allah, and that is what is expected of us mortals. To be the best we can at all times and to bring peace and tranquility into lives.
Well, I am giving you a 5 for that wonderful piece of writing! I also believe in Jesus but probably in a slightly different way. However, in my belief, one always has to be true to oneself. That is just what you are doing and I congratulate you for that.
We are all individual expressions of God and as such, must be true to ourselves because God in us, as us, is us. And so it is.
Love and Light to you.
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