This is a very nice short story. I liked how at first, it was unexplainable and there was a real sense of confusion. I wish that the general fear that the characters were experiencing was described a little further, but I really enjoyed this in general. My only other thought is that it is a little difficult to relate to the characters. However, I think it's a good base to start from, and would really come alive with a few extra details.
Thank you so much for allowing reviews on your work, and keep writing!
AutumnalBloom
Congratulations! I hope you're doing well, and enjoying plenty of success in NaNoWriMo! It's a tough challenge, and I commend you for doing it. I think you'll be able to do it, and your reasoning is very logical. You set a goal, and it sounds like you're going to stick to it. Only two more days as well, you're so close! Congrats again, and keep writing.
AutumnalBloom
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