This is absolutely the best thing that I have ever read. So good, so well-placed, so meaningful, and full of a living irony. The modality adds some color to the whole verse. The use of some funny comparisons is also a great advantage. I would say that it is almost a masterpiece.
It sounds appealing to me, but there are a lot of repetition of some specific words and the order of words if we can speak about something like that is... I don't know how to explain it but it would be better some words to not leap to the eye when we read the verses diagonally. I mean I like this piece of work a lot but some criticism is needed a bit. For example this verse looks a bit trite to me "Don’t you find it amazing, how amnesia brought us here,/How my little forgetfulness allowed us to get near..."
All the other verses are very, very, very good and well-structured - really depicting some state of mind but not in a trivial way. Hands up! Good job!
The verse really made me laugh but its topic is really serious. So deep meaning about the different ways to survive and how to overcome the lack of meaning of your own existence. Maybe there are so many lost souls trying to hide but the number of the hideouts is quite limited. Great use of synonyms and really funny stuff.
I like the stuff. Very clever and meaningful. No doubt that so many people are feeling like that. The process of cloning cannot solve the problem of the lyrical hero. Another example of verses that sound in my head as well. The author knows well that there is no beginning and no end. And everything is in the head. Good stuff again. For this one, I will give a five-star rating because it shows the reality. Only one small suggestion - the repetition of the word idea could be avoided and replaced with something different and more meaningful. Every other detail in these free verse is second to none. My admirations!
Honestly, I feel like someone with a talent and vision like mine but much greater use of simple vocabulary and blank verses if we can call them blank is showing something so gross and real. The picture of life and death. Really sick stuff. I like it. It carries the feeling of thrusting the blade into the victim's throat and hear the unheard screams because the hidden desire of the victim is just like this one. By the way, last but not least, so great - no drama, just some sketches giving you the idea of being the creator of something so ugly and horrific, but so meaningful at the same time - the satisfaction of the victims' desire to be victimized. Something so esoteric and isomorphic that even some metaphysics can be used to no avail because the poet points it out simple.
The author reveals how peacefully can someone live in a forest but the forest is just a temporary shelter. Obviously, for some people it is the beginning of a new life. Well-organized, well-structured, and well balanced in terms of using of basic vocabulary and expressions.
The description of the dog seems very good and interesting. Its name brings some sense of romantics to the whole story. Possibly the human's best friend has save the boy's life. Not to mention that so many people neglect the duties of our dogs. I will give a full five-star rating here.
Eternal love is maybe the only way for anyone to overcome everything. The angels are everywhere - they guide us, they try to support us, but we need to use our imagination and survive. This is the hidden meaning of these wonderful verses. It is really difficult for everyone to keep the dream not to be away and enter the harsh world of survival.
I like the rain because it symbolizes the rebirth itself. I also like the whole feeling of this kind of poetry. It is really primordial and appealing how we can become a part of the whole nature. High admirations for the great two verses showing all that.
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