This poem is nice. Short yet powerful. Heartbreak certainly is a topic many people can relate on and this poem is generalized to where more than one person in similar situations can relate. A few things that catch my attention (only because I'm a stickler for this kind of stuff..) is punctuation. It may not seem like a big deal but a comma, period, or a semi-colon can definitely bring your poem to even further lengths. It also adds breaths that the reader will subconsciously take while reading instead of having it all thrown at you at once. There are instances where having no punctuation is detrimental to the poem and further proves a theme or a point, however, I do not see that being the case here. Also, one final thing.. "thru". If you spell your words all the way out properly and refrain from using slang or lingo (unless it's detrimental to the pattern of the poem) it will add an even greater impact to the poem and the feeling you are trying to get across to your reader. It is a good poem but with these little things added, it could go farther. Maybe, if you extend it or embellish more into the poem... who knows how far you can take it!
Really good. I enjoyed reading it. Actually I would love it if you were to continue it or expand on this concept of a insane serial killer ringmaster. Transform it into a novella.. that'd really be a unique and fun read. Keep going!
Plus I love this format. Truly amazing!
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