This is a sad but sweet poem. Your imagery is surperb and its full of emotion. I truly understand your dilemma and my heart goes out to you. You are in love with someone yet you are afraid to show it. In fear of how that person may react? What if he does not love you back? Well, if I am right, I truly do understand. I find myself in the same situation . What can we do?
I wish I could just open the door for you
As for any errors I do not see any.
It is a very well written poem. The stucture is great and u managed to maintain the aa bb rhyme.
Please accept my deepest sympathies for the loss of your mother.
As for the poem, I think it is very well written. Full of emotion and great choice of words.
Also I see that you are a very strong believer in the Almighty Father. Despite the sadness, the hope and strength that you have to go on is evident.
This is great! With God all things are possible and He will never leave your side.
Keep the faith and well done
Opinions and comments: This is a very intense and captivating poem. Great! After the first few lines, I could sense the evil spirit. The imagery is spectacular. My blood went cold while reading this. Well done
This is a free verse so I can not critique the structure based on rhyme or syllables or any other traditional methods. However I can say the poem flowed very well and I did not have any problems inderstanding it.
Sorry to hear about your heartache. Time will heal all. Anyways, the poem is very good. Overall wellwritten. Hoever, at the beging, I found it a little confusing. Beside this small problem, I found the poem great. Very full of emotion
Despite the length it is very direct and well written. Also it is very true. People are "free" to speak there mind however, when they speak more often that not their words are misinterpreted. It is a viscious cycle.
I am not one that reads fantacy on a regular basis, I am more into dramas so I do not claim to be an expert at it. However, something about your story caught my attention and interest. I am very happy that I took the time to read it. Well done and very well written.
Good luck and keep writing I am very interested in finding out what happens next
As someone who really enjoys reading and writing poet, I can say this is a very good and well written poem. After reading the first line, I found myself enraveled in the poem and very curios as to what was next. I found your writing to be full of emotion. Well done and keep writing When does this matter?
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