Hello,
I always like reading and reviewing items concerned with Spring or Autumn. Your poem is just another piece that pulled me to review !
My suggestion:-
Maybe you could use some other word for "pungent" in the last para. It somehow doesn't deliver that happy feeling of Spring.The flow can be a little better.
I enjoyed this poem, it has very nice description and imagery and the feeling that the poem gives is great !
The second, third and the fourth para are the best !
You have different rhyme schemes in every para and still kept the flow good.
My favourite:-
Rippling waters of a clear mountain stream
Golden aspen leaves quaking on their twigs
I have no suggestions at all for this piece ! I simply loved the picture that you have put up, "She whispered her Secrets".. You have arranged everything so well in your Port !
Every line in this poem is lovely ! I don't know how to describe the feeling i got after reading this.. You took me "there" !!!
I'm giving you a "perfect" rating because your poem is simply wonderful ! The description, the sounds that you show, everything is so perfect !!
I'll be a frequent visitor !! You are on my favourites list !
Overall:-
Wow ! That was a good reading.. I really enjoyed it !
I was wondering what you were talking about first, then slowly everything cleared up.. good work !
Spellings/grammar:-
Perfect. i didn't find any defects !That's why you are getting a high rating from me.
My suggestions:-
try adding colors and try to make the presentation better..
They creep up behind like a silent dark beast
Stalking their prey, until suddenly they catch
A right moment, then they pounce and snatch
Their unsuspecting owner, devour, have a feast.
my other comments:-
i have to admit that i liked this poem very much. Though it didn't scare me, i think it is very imaginative and creative.
You have taken the spells from Harry Potter books and formed your poem. That is really creative. i hope you do more stuff like this.
But i think you should take care of the flow a little more. Only a little more. Otherwise, i think it is a brilliant work !
My favourite lines:-
Impedimenta! Starlynn, bind this world.
Bind what is ugly, unleash what is true.
Hold only love in your heart.
Find only beauty in your self.
Hold yourself to that.
To the good, the noble, the lovely.
The binding curse.. i am glad you used it to express something positive !
I never knew of this disorder till now. I mean, i know many in this, but i never heard any of my friends or relatives talking about this aspect when we discussed personalitites..
To be honest, I've never heard of this disorder.
Maybe my knowledge on these topics is nil.
I see that in the article that you have linked to this page, many notable figures are also affected with it...i really don't know the meaning of this. it is a positive one or a negative one ?
i always had this kind of thought before, to be honest. i am overcoming this now and thank god i'm doing it ! it all started when my friend once hid under my bed and tried to scare me by grabbing ! And she really did it..
This piece is very useful.
But there should have been more points in it so the newbies can find it as easy as possible.
"The Content Of A Review" Should have been more elaborate giving details about how the starting of a review should be and how a review should be ended.
Other than these points, everything is good.
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