This was really good!! My favorite line is " Two lovers once sharing a world of fun, Later found their hearts after all were not one." I liked that line because I feel like that's something everyone can relate to. You think you love someone but in the end there's no love. Great job :)!!
I really like this. Normally I don't like ones that ryme, but I really like this one. My favorite line is " My soul is now free, it suffers no more, Caught by the spirite, I begin to soar" great job :)
I really like this. I feel like i can connect with this bwcause although my father is not dead, he is gone. My father has never really been in my life. He moved a lot and when he lived down the street from me he was still never there. He never called, never texted me, and never came to see me. I guess you could say i am fatherless as well. I also really like it because i love when i can connect with a stroy or poem.
This is a really good poem. I'm not going to lie, i don't go to church and to be honest i don't really know anything about god, but that being said, i really liked this poem. think it's deep,you put a lot of thought into it. very nice
Really nice poem. i like how you decribed what war is and is not. I fell like it could have used a little detail though. Over all it was a really good poem!!
This was a really good poem. My favorite line is "pain is blind". Very true line. No one really know who is hurting because as you said,
pain is blind"
I like how she lived for him and he being a guy did't care, he was only worried about himself and cought up on himself. I like the part that sayd " she finally smiled for her independence" that speaks to me because my mom raised me to be a very independent women and not have to depend on someone else for anything. I aso feel like it could have used a little detail. like when it says "loved to beat her", what did he do to her?
i think it's a really good poem. I like the last line, the one that says " if one day she stopped breathing, would anyone care at all?" i feel like it's a powerful line. I also think you could use some more detalils.
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