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Rated: E | (3.5)
I have a bit of knowledge on PTSD (Post Traumatic Stress Disorder) and this reminds me of it. This poem reminds me of times far past me when you reveal yourself to someone and suddenly you become cold and lost and like anything else in your mind is completely unavailable. Like being lost in a crowd with all your friends around you but seeing no one but your own reflection. Its beautiful. The only thing I can ask is that you avoid cliches and use periods at the end of a thought. Just because its a poem doesn't mean you don't have to use punctuation.
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Review of a thought  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is INCREDIBLE. No critisicm here.
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Review of Taking Shelter  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
This was really, really, good. I mean i was shocked at how wonderfully descriptive it is.
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Review of Insanity  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Does crazy sound good? How about insane? something a bit more dramatic.
maybe she could speak, not talk. Maybe she bellows notes and melodies until she drowns out her useless thoughts? This is a raw emotional poem with a lot of beauty and thought put forth. I loved the ideas but they could have used more description and depth.
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Review of Freedom  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (3.0)
I loved the description. I loved how direct it was. I cant really say that the subject asked for such a happy ending. In reality, how often is that departure not bitter sweet? Losing someone that has beaten you can leave you scarred and missing them for years. Its a wonderful poem but unfortunately far from the truth when it comes to the research behind the psychology of someone who is abused, there is a very low statistic of people who are fully liberated the moment they walk out of an abusive relationship. If this is from personal experience great. If not, I would recommend a bit more research.
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