What I love about this interactive is its openness. The first chapter gives you the potential to explore more or less every possible situation you'd want to be involved in, and there's a tremendous amount of freedom to be had within that. Though there are some rules provided, they're relatively easy to adhere to. I feel like it has enabled me to explore basically every aspect of giant/tiny stuff that I'd have even the remotest interest in exploring, and I'm very grateful for that.
Fun! I'm interested in how this is going to develop.
There's a lot of pretty good world-building going on in this early chapter and I get a sense of who the characters are and what they want, and the ending drives interest in later chapters.
That said, I think the dialogue could be a little sharper - some of it is maybe a bit cliched? - and the long paragraphs in the middle could have been broken up with dialogue. But it's good! Well done.
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