Very good story. Reminds me of the tale of the three trees, a children's tale I read to my son sometimes. You might find it interesting. :) Very good perspective from a tree's point of view.
Very interesting poem about reviewing. Reminded me of that song "The devil went down Georgia' with the rhyme scheme. Have no idea why, just came to mind. Very well done! Reviews can often be tricky and melodramatic as well when the writer's feelings become involved.
Great poem about solitude. Sometimes it helps us to refocus on things and let us clear our heads. Darkness can be the blanket for our souls at night. Great poem!
Nice to read a happy ending. Glad to read things worked out for the best. The only suggestion I have is paragraphs but that might not be the style you were going for. Anyhows, great job and good luck! Feel free to reveiw my things if you want to.
Superb poetry! It is sad when a friendship comes to an end, especially one where serious feelings are involved. Overall the poem was really good, the only thing I would change is the fourth line where you should put "causes" instead of "caused" to keep it in the right tense. Really great poem and I like the use of paranthesis as well.
This poem really illustrates how people have different opinions on friendship. For some it is a commodity to be discarded at the slightest sign of problems or disagreement. For others it is being there for the other person no matter what this life throws at them. Very good poem. Good luck on your flight. A good friend can be hard to find.
Very good story. Reminded me of that story I read a long time ago about a man waking up as a cockroache. I enjoyed the description you used in describing the action. When the frog becomes the pupil instead of when the teacher becomes the pupil. lol Great story with a twist. Really descriptive and catchy ending.
Outstanding! I love reading about history so the beginning was no bore at all and shouldn't be for anyone anyway since it was a tremondous war. I really liked how you brought his stories to life. You are very good at being descriptive and the story had a really great flow to it. Main word of advice for this story is to keep going with it.
A poem about finding true love is great. Especially one that is optimistic about taking the chance. I am not very famaliar with writing poems but this one seemed to have a good sense of rhyme. A very optimistic poem with a valuable lesson.
That poem really puts a positive spin on the question of friendship or love. I think the rhyming was very good. The first poem I have read that broaches the subject. The poem tells us to put away our fears and go for love and that can't be bad.
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